Cartoon Girl

[thondal]

looks nice and clean ;), waiting hopefully for updates ;) (ps, not easy to get feedback here if you don't suprise people or something :P)

-thondal-

[TFarrar]

I started the hair it's pretty rough ATM. I wanted to do poly hair but with a little more detail. So as always C&C are always welcome.

http://www.tfarrar.com/modo_girl_hair_1.jpg

[Praetus]

the forehead seems a bit flat to me. Likea sheer drop-off

[eternal01]

Hum.. I think the only thing that maybe you could change are the ears... the bottom part seems quite short... But.. since it's a cartoon character maybe it was a deformation you wanted? And.. it's true that we do not really see them with the hair over them...
Well... over all I pretty much like her!! Really cool! Will you give her a body??

[TFarrar]

Hi all,

I finally got some time to work on this character again. I started her body, but I am not happy with it yet. So if anyone has any suggestions I'll be happy to hear them.



http://www.tfarrar.com/modo_girl_body_1.jpg

[bbob]

Maybe try making her chest a bit wider to make her more feminine?

http://img176.imageshack.us/img176/7671/critpointswp0.jpg

[TFarrar]

I decided to put her in a flight suit inspired by the amine “Last Exile”.

http://www.tfarrar.com/modo_girl_body_2.jpghttp://www.tfarrar.com/modo_girl_body_3.jpg

[nuclearbum]

cartoony girls rule!

first of all this looks like a great start, nice and clean topology! the flight suit looks cool and i'm liking the white stripe thingy. i think you have a strong model that is also animation friendly (you are going to animate her, right? RIGHT?!?!)

here's some feedback and thoughts:

i kinda agree with bbob about making the torso bulge out more, though looking at your latest picture it's not as apparent. i think part of it has to do with adding the cloth detail to make the over all look more interesting thus the extra curves aren't needed to make interesting shapes and stuff(hehe, sorry i'm going off on a theoretical tangent).

back on track, the back shot of the butt, it sticks out a bit, maybe have it tapper back a little slower or maybe make the arch in the back a little less intense.

and if you got any concepts, post them up so i can get a feel of what you're aiming for, since i'm not sure if you're doing some things on purpose or not.

alrighty, keep it up! i'm looking forward to the progress!

[Kanga]

Nice stuff.

Pull the chin back a tad along with the lower lip.

You can keep the pointy chin but flesh out the area between the cheek and the chin point in the front view.

Get the hair line down. High foreheads are a sign of advanced age.

[dEDa]

Compliments, it's coming great!
Maybe the face is too much flat...
dEDa

[phantomworkshop]

I dig this character, especially that suit!

[TFarrar]

Thank you all for the great comments and advice.

Here is a small update, trying to get her arms and legs portioned to her body. This was done before I readied the comments, so my next post should reflect all the great advice.

http://www.tfarrar.com/modo_girl_body_4.jpghttp://www.tfarrar.com/modo_girl_body_5.jpg

[phantomworkshop]

Hey Remy, I really like how this one is shaping up. I'm curious, did you use any tutorials to build this Character? Or, could you recommend any to learn this type of modeling? I've been trying to find some myself.

[Roughy]

ah, the Last Exile suit...

What kinda enviroment are you planning for her? Vanship or something?

[JYoung]

The lower body proportions seem off to me. The upper leg looks too long when compared to the lower leg, and I think the butt shape/size could use some tweaking.

[TFarrar]

ah, the Last Exile suit...

What kinda enviroment are you planning for her? Vanship or something?

I do plan on doing an animation with her and I am toying with a "dogfight" idea with a couple of "Vanship" style fighters. Even thou I am using Range Murata "Last Exile" as the inspiration for this piece I am not trying to recreate any of his stuff exactly the way he drew them.

And again thank you all for the great comments and advise, I am really surprise by the reaction I have gotten so far on this character.

[FlaminGlow]

like your style i like the modeling too, fantastic come on update it. :)

[Darkmesh]

Very niche Work ;) Animestyle Rocks ;)

[TFarrar]

Here is another small update.

http://www.tfarrar.com/modo_girl_1.jpghttp://www.tfarrar.com/modo_girl_2.jpg

[eternal01]

Hi, very nice!
But I think the coloration in the face should be somewhat less "pinkish". Like around the mouth and the nose, the coloration is pretty. But on the forehead and the neck, for me, it seems as though she put that makeup she has on her eyes there too o.O...
Otherwise, pretty cool!
And I love the suit!

[TFarrar]

It’s been awhile sense I have had time to work on this character. But just wanted to post an update. I changed her proportions abit and gave her different boots.

http://www.tfarrar.com/modo_girl_full.jpghttp://www.tfarrar.com/modo_girl_full_wire.jpg

[TFarrar]

Sorry, it’s been awhile since I done any work on her, but as we all know making a living has to come first.

Here is another small update, hope you enjoy and as always C&C are welcome.

http://www.tfarrar.com/rayne_back_1.jpghttp://www.tfarrar.com/rayne_back_2.jpg

[Onslaught_2000]

hi remy i love you toon model, and i'm hopeing you can give me some advice on how the hair.
I'm also working on a anime type model and i'm having problems with model the hair the way it needs to me. Here is a pic on the hair style i am trying to get http://home.earthlink.net/~gray_fox001/images/1148444833940.jpg
Seeing that you model hair is almost like it i hope you can tell me what i need to do to get the look, or can you point me to a good tut that will show me how i can get the look?? Thanks for the help.

[TFarrar]

Hi all, I got a little time to work on this character again, I went ahead and tried a pose with her. And yes I rip off the idea from one of Range Murata Last Exile illustrations. Enjoy and C&C are always needed.

http://tfarrar.com/rayne_posed.jpg

[Onslaught_2000]

WOw nice dude!! Can you tell me what you're going to create an animation with her i would love to see it. Also i asked this before, but you never got back to me on it. I'm also working on a female anime like model, and i'm having problems with the hair, and i was hoping since you know how to model that kind of hair style I was wondering if you would give me some tips on how it is done, or even a link to a tut that wold help me. Well i hope i hear from you soon.

[TFarrar]

WOw nice dude!! Can you tell me what you're going to create an animation with her i would love to see it. Also i asked this before, but you never got back to me on it. I'm also working on a female anime like model, and i'm having problems with the hair, and i was hoping since you know how to model that kind of hair style I was wondering if you would give me some tips on how it is done, or even a link to a tut that wold help me. Well i hope i hear from you soon.
http://www.tfarrar.com/rayne_hair.jpg

The way I did the hair for her was by first taking the polygons that made the top of her head, copy them, and then extruded them out a little to make the base and the hair line. Then I made the other pieces separately by using a tool in Modo call Sketch Extrude. (other 3d packages have same type of tool) The tools allows me the rough out the shape then go back in it and edit the curve it creates, then refine the shape and the flow. And the last step is tweaking the vertexes to get the look I was going for.

Hope this helps.

[TFarrar]

Double post sorry cant figure out how to delete it.

[Onslaught_2000]

Thanks dude i will give it a try today, I hope i can get this hari style http://home.earthlink.net/%7Egray_fox001/1148444833940.jpg

[RevXwise]

Looks nice. Her eyes kind of look like alien eyes, but with proper texturing it should look fine.

[Onslaught_2000]

Sorry that drawing is not mines. I'm how ever works on a models based on her.

[NovaKane]

Hey man, your character is definitely coming along nicely, i like her style.
The only thing that i can comment on so far is her lips, i think they could be a shaped better to add even more interest to her face

:)

[TFarrar]

Thanks for all the great comments!

Here is another update; I feel I'm getting close to finishing her. I need to add more elements to the background, to make this scene more interesting.

http://www.tfarrar.com/rayne_posed_1.jpg

[THF-arts]

Nice work man, i like the style

[Onslaught_2000]

WOW i love the new light for you scene. i cant wait to see what new improvments you will add to the scene.. Umm also are you ever going to animate your model?

[vdelanno]

I like it. But the position of the hand doesn't feel natural at all. You should modify this, I think

[tanguydewavrin]

the bum sticks out a bit too much don't you think?

[Onslaught_2000]

I would have to dissagree with you i think her butt looks really good. Keep up the good work.

[Start3d]

Is This Modo??????????

its a powerful Modeling program

I Like It I wish i could learn it and be professional using this Application

your Work is VERY VERY Nice

i LIKE it so much

[Cabot]

First and foremost, you've done an excellent job, congratulations!

And Phantomworkshop, you asked about a tutorial, I see it got overlooked. You really should check out the Joan Of Arc tutorial. It's a fantastic tutorial, a great learning tool, and you'll be more than happy with your results!

http://www.3dtotal.com/ffa/tutorials/max/joanofarc/head6.asp

Enjoy!

[CGOutcast]

sweet piece, looks good.

[TFarrar]

Is This Modo??????????

Yes, I use Modo, for pretty much everything theses day.

But I did used bones in Lightwave to pose her (also to eventully animate her), and then used “Save Trans Object” so she keeps the pose. Then bought her back into Modo to clean up, and render.

http://www.tfarrar.com/rayne_boned.jpg

[TFarrar]

Here is my latest for this image I been working on and off for awhile now. I think I am almost finished with it, but would like any comments to make this a great image. Thanks

http://www.tfarrar.com/rayne_comp.jpg

[ArtZealot]

I liked the model texture and all exept of the "eyes" really u can improve on ur eyes to make it look more good !!! otherwise nice stuff !!!

[reallifeistoflat]

it was mentioned before but i think the hands would look more natural if they were gripping the lip of the ledge

otherwise looking great

~Reid

[anim8tedtoon]

Hey man I would first like to say that the final image is well presented. The character is done very well. My only critique would be for me as an animator is that I think the pose seems little stiff for the character. Also, her left wrist seems broken do to the fact that it is posed flat. I would raise the hand slight and angle it for a more relaxed pose. Other then that I look forward to seeing some of the animations of this character.

www.anim8ted-toon.com

[dxk123852]

lovely:thumbsup: nice work

[CKPinson]

Nice- She's good- and her butt is definately not too BIG- heck, could be bigger if ya want- My only crit is that the last render seems grainy. Other than that *****

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