photoshop! crits!

[Joebount]

Too much colors, unreadable, what is it ???

Seriously needs more work, from the begining.

[robingfx]

I agree with Joebount. It is hard to read the text. I think the font is very cliché; I bet we all have that one on our computers. I don’t know what this piece is for, but be creative with the text. Write something on a piece of paper and scan it. Pull out your old fingerpaint, cut letters out of paper or plastic or what have you.

None of the graphical elements reflect what you’re writing at the bottom. There is not a whole lot of thought behind the piece.

Keep working on it, or create 10 more pieces and refine the one you like the most!

[mawashi]

Although at first i couldn't understand the image, after more careful observation I did see the guy in the middle :p

So, I guess the explosion is the destruction, or the "world falls down on me" part, and the guy is holding the shining light of "hope".

I don't think that the piece you created sucks, but I do think that if you put more thought into it, you'll have better ones. The current one looks already on the right track, but it lacks an "oomph", if you know what i mean. The image doesn't make the viewer feel anything.

And IMHO it'll be better if there's a focal point in your picture. This one has none. Viewer's attention is not focused anywhere.

Just a suggestion: maybe if you make the whole image dark and gloomy, full of disasters, sadness etc (monochrome, maybe?), and then put your "tiny little spark of hope" somewhere there, it'll convey the "hope" idea better. But then again, it's just my newbie opinion.

Good luck :thumbsup:

[Digiegg]

I know the text is a problem...
about FOCUSING the middle object.. what can i do?

[Digiegg]

here is another version.

http://members.cox.net/dj-shinji/OOO/hopev2.jpg

I think that huge GLOWING mood in the middle is gone... but you can see me better on this picture... i tried to get it "focused"...
hmmm... crits please!!

[mister conehead]

It's a little busie in your picture. Colors are to heavy I think. Also the glow of everything makes it a little bit unreadable. Try to make people focus on the middel (your picture) so, make the surroundings a little more quiet. Mayebe desaturate it, or a little less chaos.

But it's much better than the first. Keep on working on it :thumbsup:

[Michael Chen]

Wickkkkkkkkkkkkked man!

The second picture rocks totally :buttrock:

Keep up the good work :thumbsup:

[jizzypop]

the second one is better, but i still think overall the image is very confusing, its too busy. maybe less saturated colors, less filters and less text would help. less is more sometimes. keep working on it, you have a good idea.


and Rukuwa, that is the most annoying avatar ever

[Digiegg]

Thanks guys..
yea i'll try to make it less complicating...
hmm any tips?

[Abominable]

I think your slowly getting there with the second one. Still typography problems. The font used for destruction and death doesnt suit your subject and the blue glowing text throws out all meaning (and legibility) on that part as well. The placement for death and destruction does work either and the color palette of the image needs a bit of tuning to unify it more. I just noticed it now but I dont think the word KILL and HOPELESS work too well together either....maybe despair or weakness, i dont know...bust out a thesaurus to help you. No offence, just my crits.:)

[Digiegg]

you guys can pound my work as long as you guys give me some crits.

[BiTMAP]

hehe welp here comes me :)

it seriously looks as if your colourblind, your colours don't even contrast nor blend...

[Digiegg]

what colors should i bring down... use? ??

[Remi]

Originally posted by jizzypop
Rukuwa, that is the most annoying avatar ever

Agreed...ouch...*starting to have seizure*:wip:

[Nazgul]

Hello!

I think you should:

1- dim the layer with all the tiny text that makes the background.

2- Try to integrate the character in the middle by painting on the character as if lit by the surrounding colors. Becareful be subtle.

3- take off that ugly blue glow around the character and make a more subtle one too.

otherwise your image will look as if made in the 80's

good luck you'll get there!
:thumbsup:

[Jarl]

The elements work fine individually, but give the viewer a chance to rest the eyes! You don't have to spell it all out in one piece of graphic...

[robingfx]

NissanSexiam,

I think it would help if you told us what this is for...what are you trying to achieve? Is this a poster, book cover, CD cover, or just an artpiece?

Use saturated colors sparingly! Your stuff will look so much more professional if you do.

[Digiegg]

It is for Scholastic Contest.
Teachers send in high school student's work.
I wanted to make this because it seemed like my life was all falling apart. But during those time I had this light inside me. And that was hope for my succession as a computer graphic aritist. My teacher wanted me to do something with pictures and stuff on photoshop so he can enter my work there.
I wanted to express that hope is still there even though everything in the world just fell down on you. So I came up with this idea of how in the background everything is falling apart.. your life that is.. and picture of me in the middle holding a light, which means hope.

[Digiegg]

Okay made another version

http://members.cox.net/dj-shinji/OOO/hopev3.jpg

[BiTMAP]

text could be bigger, but i like this one alot :)

[Digiegg]

Originally posted by BiTMAP
text could be bigger, but i like this one alot :)

Thanks! whew.. good thing i got positive response from people...
I guess I really suck at picking colors huh?
I know I have to clean up the image a bit.
I'll make the text bigger.
anything eles?
can you tell it's me that's kneeling down holding a light?

[EdmX]

+++f+ck++++
i'm new here...don't know how this forum works...
well, 'll try again....
I think the colors are not matching up ......

but is in the rigth direction...
;]

[Lunatique]

For this type of style, you should take a look at my friend's work:

http://www.jasonfelix.com

[Digiegg]

hey! it's you!
ahaha i wrote you a letter on how I admired your work!
^^
I'm thinking of making me blue again like the first one.
hmm dunno..

And wow.. you friend's work is amazing! i love them!!!

[Totitch]

Sorry to be hard but for me there is nothing to critic here!

Just 3-4 pictures without an ounce of making-up and with too much Cheap Photoshop effects...:shrug:
I don't know what you will learn with this sort of exercice!

[Digiegg]

well thanks to your crits I got Silver Key in the contest. ^^
basically 2nd place ^^ thanks guys
final image is
http://members.cox.net/dj-shinji/OOO/Index4.jpg

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