Feedback please

[DamonDuBois]

It's a good start.

There are a few things about the way it's rendered that doesn't seem right to me though. Like the hair, the eyes and the skin tones.

Here's a good set of tutorials that I've found helpful:
http://www.furiae.com/index.php?view=gallery

[Annette]

"There are a few things about the way it's rendered that doesn't seem right to me"

Please can you tell me in what way :)

I think her arms aree wrong and maybe her nose

[escapizm]

your skin tones look a little over brown, although it could just be the monitor i'm on. the proportions certainly need to be worked on, namely the length of the nose. technically its rather good so far, although you need to work some dimension into the sides of the face, as the cheeks are very flat and throw of the rest of the face. also, be aware of the lightsource, ie her forehead shouldn't be lit the way it is as the hair would affect it. keep it coming, i'll be watching!

[DamonDuBois]

"There are a few things about the way it's rendered that doesn't seem right to me"

Please can you tell me in what way :)

I think her arms aree wrong and maybe her nose

Well, for starters, I agree with everything escapizm said. The nose is a little too long, but I think the eyes are also possibly a little too high. And definetly decide on a direction for the light. It appears to be coming from directly in front. You'd probably get better results if you picked a direction slightly from one side or the other for the main light to come from.

Some of the skin tones seem a little wrong to me. There appears to be some grey along the sides of her nose that doesn't look right. I'm not an expert on skin tones though, so I'd say look at art from people who do really good skin tones. The site that I linked in my previous post is a great place to look around to see how a master handles skin tones.

The colors you've used in the hair look ok, but the way it's drawn makes it look a little more like yarn than hair. Hair is much thinner with many fine strands visible. It should also look a little shiny in places where the light hits it more strongly.

[Annette]

thank you both for your help and encouragement :)

I have shortened her nose abit and will keep working on her skin tone and her hair, which is only in the early stages .... i have not put much light /shadow on the picture yet , i think it will come from the left hand side.

Thanks once again :)

[pap87]

I won't go and repeat what everyone else has said. It's enough to hear it once, heh!

Regarding a background.
Your picture very much reminds me of a 3D render of a fairy lying on a beach, the pose is very similar. Anyway, my point I guess is choose a setting where she is lying down on something, a bed for instance.

Anyhow, good luck with the improvements!:)

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