Night Train, Sakari Tiikkaja (2D)

[pmatlock]

Great image!!

There is few things that bug me. The head light beam has clouds (steam) showing through it. It's as though it is a background cloud that shouldn't be showing. Maybe it's a layering mistake in photshop? The tiling doesn't merge well with the gravel beside the rail. It seems like there should be some gravel scattering or a a solid edge where the tile ends. The stars are showing to brightly through the steam in the upper right hand corner of the image.

As a minor critic: The lighting on the train and the lighting on the steam/smoke don't hang well with me. I call this a minor critic because it may just be me and my skewed view of the world (HA!).

Good composite though!:thumbsup:

[rajbir]

Hey buddy nice work and well done but u need to do something about thehead light :sad:.
2. what is the ligth source and from where it is coming and if the light source is moon it wont make the clouds glow that much but does'nt catches the attention much.but if u look carefully on the top of the train on the small domes u can see shining/ reflection of the light , as the light cource is on the right but if u look at the clouds and the shadows where they are forming light source seems to be up on the left side.
well i like the composition

i tried to explain wat i wanted to say. the clouds ythat i havemarked in red and white (shadows seems to be appearing as if he light source is up but, the reflection on the 3 chambers that i have marked in red are showin g reflection from right

http://img87.imageshack.us/img87/4001/2043901143715614medium5uc.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

[xric7]

fantastic work!seem unreal but i love it.:bounce: :thumbsup:

[Sakari]

Thanks for the crits guys. Duly noted. Although I must point out that the areas you mentioned were mainly obscured by title and author typography so I didn't go into detail in those areas... But I guess that's no reason to do things right, right? ;) Your comments are valued and very much appreciated.

-Sakari

[ralphmanning]

It looks nice at first glance, but the more I look, the more imperfections I notice.

I think the stars are too visible through the cloud for the type of 'thick' cloud it is. Dull them down a lot of remove them completely.

[Sakari]

I had to go and dig up the project files. The reason I left the smoke billows in the headlight beam so pronounced is that I used the same image in the back cover... Only run through IndiaInk plug in and tweaked somewhat.

Here's a link:

http://www.radiantgraphics.fi/dropzone/CGSociety/jokinen10-F6c.jpg


I might have toned them down in the front, but I felt they were somehow more illustrative that way. but I admit I could have manipulated the steamclouds to have a same light source... Thanks for the constructive crits.


-Sakari

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