need crit for animation storyboard

[xzevlin]

I think it's all great, except for about the 11th shot, where it goes from looking straight down at the character as he gets the idea, to the shot from below him where he grabs the arrow. 180 degree cuts are usually pretty hard to follow for the viewer, it gives a jolt away from what's going on, and in something as short as 20 seconds that could be fatal.

Great concept, I can't wait to see it.

[PANZER]

yeah the last scene is a lil unclear ... whether he's going in the lift or out.. the camera angle should be changed i think. other thatn that.... great short and funny idea. it would be fun to animate.:thumbsup:

[mockingbird]

thanks for the reply guys, i will definatly change the last camera cut and put it in the same shot as the looking down scene and also change the landing in the lift shot so its more apparent whats happening. thanks again.
anymore comments are welcome everyone :)

[E.Z. Schwartz]

I think you should play down the part where he gets the idea to turn back the elevator with the dial. I think it's an animation cliche for a character to have an idea and do that "i have an idea" gesture. You give life by showing that your character is thinking, but I think being over obvious that the character has a thought ruins that somewhat. Otherwise I like it.

Ezra

[mockingbird]

good point E.Z. yeha goota change that one too. Anyone know of any films live or animated which has an actor change of scared to happy?

[CGTalk Moderation]

This thread has been automatically closed as it remained inactive for 12 months. If you wish to continue the discussion, please create a new thread in the appropriate forum.