gooms9
02-27-2006, 11:53 PM
Hey, i'm trying to make a short machinima using the MMORPG World of Warcraft. I've come up with a rough story outline and I thought i'd just post it here to get some feedback and advice. Keep in mind this is a very rough outline and I havn't come up with many of the details.
Basically it's about a guy, who is the captain of the stormwind (the human city in the game) guard. He has a wife and a small son. Some group of rebel bandits kill his wife and child. This (obviously) sends him into a downward spiral of rage and anger.
A few months later, when they're on some sort of mission, they come across a village of these same bandits. Blinded by rage, the captain orders the whole village to be destroyed, including the women and children.
The king of stormwind is furious that this captain would do something so rash and against the "stormwind way", and boots him out of the city. The captain has been corrupted by the events of the last few months and has a thirst for revenge. Killing the village didn't fulfill his bloodrage, and he vows to take revenge on the city that threw him out into the cold.
He amasses a small group of other stormwind exiles, all of whome wish to take revenge for whatever reason.
And this is basically as far as i've gotten. The way I wanted to tell the story is to start off near the end, where the captain, for whatever reasoning, has decided to return to stormwind, and you see the stormwind guards arresting him, and throwing him in jail. Then in his cell he reflects on the events that led him to where he is today. Then i wanted to finish it off by continueing the events that we saw at the beginning, if that makes any sense.
I had come up with an idea where he has some sort of contact within stormwind, and he comes back to get himself arrested. Then his contact releases him in the middle of the night, and they open up the gates and let his army in, and i'd continue it from there. That seemed to much like the trojan horse story though and it just didn't seem to fit with what I wanted.
So what i really want to know is how do you think i could finish this off? What reasoning could he have for returning to the city knowing that he'll get arrested?
I'm sorry about the disorganization of this post, i was just writing down thoughts straight from my head. I'm going to start putting something down on paper now, but i thought it would be a good idea to get some feedback from someone who knows what they're talking about.
Thanks for any help you can give me!
Basically it's about a guy, who is the captain of the stormwind (the human city in the game) guard. He has a wife and a small son. Some group of rebel bandits kill his wife and child. This (obviously) sends him into a downward spiral of rage and anger.
A few months later, when they're on some sort of mission, they come across a village of these same bandits. Blinded by rage, the captain orders the whole village to be destroyed, including the women and children.
The king of stormwind is furious that this captain would do something so rash and against the "stormwind way", and boots him out of the city. The captain has been corrupted by the events of the last few months and has a thirst for revenge. Killing the village didn't fulfill his bloodrage, and he vows to take revenge on the city that threw him out into the cold.
He amasses a small group of other stormwind exiles, all of whome wish to take revenge for whatever reason.
And this is basically as far as i've gotten. The way I wanted to tell the story is to start off near the end, where the captain, for whatever reasoning, has decided to return to stormwind, and you see the stormwind guards arresting him, and throwing him in jail. Then in his cell he reflects on the events that led him to where he is today. Then i wanted to finish it off by continueing the events that we saw at the beginning, if that makes any sense.
I had come up with an idea where he has some sort of contact within stormwind, and he comes back to get himself arrested. Then his contact releases him in the middle of the night, and they open up the gates and let his army in, and i'd continue it from there. That seemed to much like the trojan horse story though and it just didn't seem to fit with what I wanted.
So what i really want to know is how do you think i could finish this off? What reasoning could he have for returning to the city knowing that he'll get arrested?
I'm sorry about the disorganization of this post, i was just writing down thoughts straight from my head. I'm going to start putting something down on paper now, but i thought it would be a good idea to get some feedback from someone who knows what they're talking about.
Thanks for any help you can give me!