Ramtin_showreel

[samoel]

well im so happy that your real demo is ready now . but unfurtuently i couldent see your file . i think your file damage ..
please chek again

[BlackStorm]

ooh very nice charactering
i like that good look mr ramtin :thumbsup:

[samoel]

rami i cant save this file i don konw why :arteest:

[YasushAzush]

nice ramtin nice:wip: grate timing on the characters babaaaaaa nice ;) good luck for you and wish you in the grate position in animation ......:beer:

[hadimoom]

Sweet Animation_Reel Ramtin.

I Hope You good luck in character Animation.

[eburdeinick]

Ramtin, saw part of your reel, I still have to download it again (errors), but I saw a mistake on your intro, you wrote "aniamtor" instead of animator, not a real problem, because your animations are really good. Just so you know !
Cheers

[hamedart]

Hey Nice job

[wtoddk]

nice reel! The robot character was my favorite, both for the character design, and for the animating...

Congratulations!

[Ramtin]

samoel_666
I`m sorry .But I do`nt know where the problem is .:rolleyes:

3D-Storm
Thanks alot mate .:)

Visualact.com
Yeah .For you too .Great wish :scream:

Hadi_moom
thanks alot hadi .mer30 .

eburdeinik
oh really thanks .great reminding .alot of greet for ur help .goodluck ...:)

Hamed_art
hey hey ,I think I know you .do`nt I ?:D Hamex ?!!

skyboysky
thanks mate .Speacial happiness cuz of seeing a spanish people here .I really like those sweet poeple .

In the I wan to thank you guys .for your viewing and share your points .thanks and goodluck ...:) :thumbsup:

[sibekhande]

nice work...

[Ramtin]

thanks alireza :)

[mattmos]

Hey Ramtin,

your reel looks good and you obviously have a lot of skill - the latest work (ie the stuff that you have pics of) is great! You've got that snappy animation style down. The middle-end of the reel feels like filler and I'd take out a lot of it, it devalues the rest of the reel, and personally I wouldn't include any of the drawings at the end, they're not as strong as the rest.

nice work, and I look forward to seeing the stuff you do in the future, I'm sure you'll carry on improving!

Matt

[Suryawanshi]

Ramtin !!!
thats a fantabulus reel man :D:D:D
Cheers m8
Sachin S. Suryawanshi

[okkio]

I can't see the file either, I just re-directed to this site:

http://www.sitesled.com/

[Ramtin]

I can't see the file either, I just re-directed to this site:

http://www.sitesled.com/


Hey guys I`m really sorry .please if you have a little time take it and try to download it from mirror link that I pu here :

http://www.walidserag.com/waleed/RamtinAhmadi_Demorell_2005.avi (http://www.walidserag.com/waleed/RamtinAhmadi_Demorell_2005.avi)

I wish to see it .

[Tasimasu]

nice reel.. my favorite is the runner :) but your reel contain some old work ı thing. some of animation not have same quality as the other. infact you have a brillant future as a character animatior. ( also your drawing s are so cool too. ) keep going, hope you see all of your dreams come true...

[HusseinAli]

WOW man thats wonderful,its really amazing

[gunslingerblack]

im not sure but it looks as thought you've taken courses at animation mentor (judging from your rigs) the biggest critique i have for the reel is it's very long. 3 minutes i found myself getting bored and wondering when it would be finished. my advice to you is to take your strongest stuff, and take the rest of it out. then organize your strong pieces into order based on which is the best and the worst of the strongest pieces, and show your best pieces first. also i would wipe out that end section with the traditional drawing. it's an animation reel afterall and after 3 minutes a potential employer might not even get to the traditional drawing. besides, for animation you only need to be able to thumbnail your action. so that section of the reel is somewhat irrelevant.

[maestrofreshal]

i concur with gunslinger...you have some very strong animation on there, use it, and wow'em, lose the old stuff and your 2d drawings.

peace

[Ramtin]

gunslingerblack[/b]]im not sure but it looks as thought you've taken courses at animation mentor (judging from your rigs) the biggest critique i have for the reel is it's very long. 3 minutes i found myself getting bored and wondering when it would be finished. my advice to you is to take your strongest stuff, and take the rest of it out. then organize your strong pieces into order based on which is the best and the worst of the strongest pieces, and show your best pieces first. also i would wipe out that end section with the traditional drawing. it's an animation reel afterall and after 3 minutes a potential employer might not even get to the traditional drawing. besides, for animation you only need to be able to thumbnail your action. so that section of the reel is somewhat irrelevant.

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i concur with gunslinger...you have some very strong animation on there, use it, and wow'em, lose the old stuff and your 2d drawings.

peace

Thanks alot guys . you`re right . As it is my first trying to make a shoe reel , I know there`s alot of mistake into my stuffs . But you`re helping me . So I can make some thing better than this .
And about animation mentro , I must say , Yes . I really like the animation mentor stuffes and rigs style for my character animation practicing . so I`ve made things like that to enjoy it . he he he . I`m sorry . my english is poor , But I think you know what I mean . you really adviced me .
thanks guys and goodluck . :)

[Chris Bacon]

nice reel man, that dude messin the race up made me laugh..hehe

[ratatat]

great reel you have here. keep up the hard work and best of luck animating... :bounce:

[Scob]

Sweet reel ....:)

I love the character , which you use for your avatar ...

Cheer...:bounce:

[yenvalmar]

you have to get rid of the drawings, as everyone said. thats going to really hurt you for trying to get a job.

as to the animation, you have a good sense of timing, given the timing the weight and so on is acceptable- but- the acting is TERRIBLE. i know these are exercizes but the characters look like they have epilepsy. they go through these bizarre poses and contortions with no explanation. the only sequence that worked for me was where the guy gets caught in the spotlight and then jumps up the wall. other than that the reactions of the characters made no sense to the enviornment.

as a character animator for a movie or whatever you would be given direction so maybe it doesnt matter, but for the sake of your own reel i'd consider more the motivation of the acting. you are doing good with the motion and timing so thats the next step.

[timkallok]

Hey Ramtin,
You've got some pretty good stuff in youre reel. But somethings are not as strong as the rest. I would suggest taking a look at all your stuff and picking out only the STRONGEST things and get rid of everything else. Also, if you are going to try and get a job as a character animator, only put drawings in your reel if they ask for it, and even then they will probably only ask for life drawings, not illustrations or concept designs.

One of the things that stood out in your reel is that your hips need alot of work. The hips are the driving force for the character and you need to make sure that they are placed correctly. If they are wrong, then the character will look off balance and the weight will be totally off. For example you have a walk cycle with just the hips and 2 legs... The one thing that is missing is the hips should move side to side (x-axis) and should be placed so that the center line goes through the middle of the hips and straght down to the ankle (looking through the foward view). Ok hope this helps!
-Tim

[RezaMisaghi]

Nice Job boy ,

Karet aliye hamshahri ;)

[freakmoomin]

yeah

decent reel, but take out some of the weaker stuff. too long and too much filler material.

good tho.

[goulei]

I like these Character ..........

[living_for_cg]

so great animations...:).. i like your work.

[Stream13]

Ramtin,

I enjoyed portions of your reel enough to want to give you some critique. I'll give you the same treatment I've given to other students in the past.

Ok here we go (sorry if this repeats other crits)

First off, the title shot:

Someone already picked out your spelling mistake so I won't talk to much about double checking everything.

I would put in the effort of making a title shot that doesn't look scanned in. There are plenty of programs you can create a crisp clean still (including After Effects etc). Get rid of the shaking and hold it still! The zooming in isn't necessary.

Get rid of the egg. It doesn't show your talent, unless it's a line test (classical animation). If it is, label it with it's own title and in a different section. Even then I'm not sure it shows more talent than stretch and squash.

I don't like the cow at all. As previous people have commented on the hips need work. Either way I think there are other animations that are better.

I really enjoy the robots. I think they look pretty good. Work on the hips though. I'm not a big fan of your editing. It seems too jumpy. Show one thing and then move onto the next.

Show titles! I'll quote from Pixar's website "If you have two dozen entries, number the TOC and put numbers on the title cards, too - we may not know the difference between your "Sleeping ball" animation and the opus you call "Lazy Sphere"."

In fact they give some really good advice so check out this link:

http://www.pixar.com/companyinfo/jobs/howto.html

Get rid of all the burglar scenes. He's too stiff. And the guy with the phone/phone.

Don't take offense to this comment: Get rid of your photo from your Demo Reel. Get rid of any reference to your name in the actual animation. It just looks unprofessional.

I haven't mentioned this yet, but Keep the lipsync sounds (the character's voice) in. Otherwise how are we going to know if you can lipsync or if you're way off!

Get rid of your music. Pick something that's not so "clubish" something a bit more subtle. A lot of times companies will turn off the sound if they don't like what you've picked. That sucks if you have any lipsync, because they'll miss any good lipsync that you have. You don't want to make them scramble to turn the sound back on. It's too much work. Turning off your demo reel is much easier.

The Yawning guy isn't too bad, but I like the robots better. If you use this one, get rid of your textures & the picture in the background. It's distracting and obviously not your strong point. All it does is take away from the animation. Grey, black or white backgrounds show an animation reel the best. Why waste time and effort on creating a background when you could be improving your animations?

The Large robot with the guns isn't up to par, cut it. Get rid of the luggage. Get rid of the moving phone.

I like the character watching TV towards the end. Though I'd work a bit more on him falling asleep in the chair.

The walk cycle with the legs needs a bit of work (mostly in the hips). Not sure you would need this since the running bit at the start shows better.

Once again I don't like the disjointed editing. Seeing the fallen runners face so far apart from him falling makes me wonder where it came from.

Have a separate title for the drawings.

Get rid of spiderman (One of my biggest pet peeves is fan art in Demo Reels) Get rid of the 3 character drawing. If you want to keep one or two of those characters in do them up properly. Your Robot character drawings looks good, so consider brings up the rest of those characters to that quality or better.

Get rid of the Piano and the charactures of your friends, or the Backstreet Boys, who ever they are. Get rid of the large robot picture, unless you only do a characture drawing of just the robot.

Same comment as before. For the multi character page, take one or two and do them properly. Clean them up. Polish, polish, polish. This is supposed to get you a job, make sure it looks crisp and clean.

Again get rid of the desert and the "wind" room. You're an animator not an environmental modeler.

What I think would be most beneficial to you for your drawing section is Life Drawing (ie drawing the naked human form). Every major city will have life drawing classes available. Even if it's not a class generally you can pay a small fee to just drop in and draw a model. If you can't afford this, please, please don't pick the raunchiest porn to draw from. Or have a friend (male or female) pose in a bathing suite for you. Or draw people in the street. You want to capture people or animal in action. Do 30 sec, 1 min, 2min, 5min drawings. Keep it loose for the short drawings. Don't worry about getting every strand of hair drawn.

Life drawing is a must have skill for any good animator!

And back to the first comment. Do a clean still for your end title. Take off the "Thanks for..." it's not necessary. Add more info to it. I don't want to go to your website and search forever to find actual contact info.

Give us at least your name and email address along with your website addy. Even better, give us your phone number as well. (I realize you may not want to put that info up on here, but add it for anything you send out). Hold the end title for a significant time so that I don't have to scramble to stop the DVD/VHS to write down your contact info. Make it easy for them.

If you're sending this out on VHS, make sure to loop the whole thing several times. If I want to see it again I don't want to have to rewind the tape. If you're sending this out on DVD makes sure your menu is SIMPLE. You don't have to go crazy on packaging and graphics. I'm hireing you for animation not as a graphic designer. That being said though, make it look nice. Clean and simple looks professional.

So to conclude:

Provide a table of contents (TOC)
Provide Titles for each section (Here's a good spot of put down what you did if it was a group project)
Keep the editing simple, no jumping back and forth between different animations.
Cut out the poor quality animation/drawings
Keep backgrounds simple. (I don't mind the robot in the back alley though)
Keep the length short. If you haven't impressed them in 30 secs you will never impress them.
Put your best work first
Put your drawings in a separate section last. Break it down as well. Characters as one title, Life drawing as another
Tone down the music & add your character's voice back (lipsync)
Make sure to say what you did! If someone else modeled those characters or backgrounds we don't want to assume you did them. So a great way to let us know is this on the title card:

"Robot Peer (June 2006): I animated the Robot"

Make sure everything is title safe. It would suck if we missed half of your robot animation if it was outside the boundaries of the TV they watch it on.

Make sure you label everything with your name and contact info. If something get separated and you don't have your name & info, then it's going in the garbage.

A lot of this same info can be found on the Pixar website (check out that link)

Pheww... I might have gone a bit over board, but I hope this helps.

Brooke

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