Chanson du soldat

[Ilikesoup]

It's not bad as a thumbnail but --
I'd like to see it without all the red squiggles.
The severed arm looks excessive for a gun battle.
There's no reference to the girlfriend in the picture -- maybe if he's clutching a photo of the girl as he lay dying?

Cool concept, though and I'd love to see you develop this.

[Thekkur]

The concept is nice... immediately reminds me of a mötorhead song :) And thus of an early battle like the first world war. I too find the severed limb a bit over the top.
A picture of his girfriend would make a nice link.
My advice: use a bigger brush.
I'd also give the man some hair :)

Work it out!

[jmBoekestein]

put him lower and more downleft, :), I think it will look more dramatic. And you could still make the soldiers dark and shady but clear in view. It looks to much like a normal shot, not like he had unusual reasons to join and die.

[zng-Y]

Damn, i realy wanne see this to be worked out. Cool point of view, should be realy dynamic!
Looking forward to your next update :beer:

[nelsig]

thanks a lot for your feedback and support... I didn't saw it before my next phase..I will take in account for the next one as it will help me a lot for my first steps in learning to draw :)

this is a quick speedpaint (30 minutes) over my first sketch

http://www.nelsig.ch/cgtalk/Soldat_concept_211205a.jpg

yes I would like to place the action during the first world war.

It's a first concept draw for an animation project I have based on a song. The girlfriend will be undertand by hearing it. In the story he is killed with an explosive shell by his girlfriend's lover.

I will recompose my image in the next step. Thanks for the tip.

The dead body will lay on the snow, if you have tips to create nice snow, it's welcome ;)

[Thekkur]

The dead body will lay on the snow, if you have tips to create nice snow, it's welcome ;)

snow is white... for a start :) Starting to look like something. Although there isn't really much left of him without his arm and lower body part... If I were you I'd focus on the subject instead of the goryness...

[Ilikesoup]

It's a first concept draw for an animation project I have based on a song. The girlfriend will be undertand by hearing it. In the story he is killed with an explosive shell by his girlfriend's lover.



I just got chills thinking of the dying soldier clutching his girlfriend's photo and her lover holding the same picture. Is "Chanson du Soldat" the name of the song? I'm curious to hear it now. Sounds like a great concept.

[nelsig]

Hi all


I just rethink about the comp and the position of the soldat with your feedbacks

I tried a lot for the position of his leg... seems to have a perspective problem...


http://www.nelsig.ch/cgtalk/Soldat_concept_211205b.jpg

many thanks for your help and HAPPY NEW YEAR !

[nelsig]

new wip

I'm blocked !

http://www.nelsig.ch/cgtalk/Soldat_concept_211205c.jpg

[nelsig]

Ok the final comp will look more like that

http://www.nelsig.ch/cgtalk/Soldat_concept_211205d.jpg

[nelsig]

I just got chills thinking of the dying soldier clutching his girlfriend's photo and her lover holding the same picture. Is "Chanson du Soldat" the name of the song? I'm curious to hear it now. Sounds like a great concept.

you can hear it here

http://www.glenofguinness.com/disc/backside/backside.html

it's an Irish Folk Style

enjoy

[nelsig]

Hello

a new update

http://www.nelsig.ch/cgtalk/Soldat_concept_211205e.jpg

[Brownboot]

I like where this is going.

My only thought would be to subdue the explosion in the background a little, that'll help it recede and increase your depth. Then you could add more cast explosion light, the reds and oranges, onto the dying soldier here in the front... just my thoughts :P.

[nelsig]

Thank you for your feedback

I post here the last changes of the evening

I'll take in account your feedback on my next progress :)

Kind Regards

Nico

http://www.nelsig.ch/cgtalk/Soldat_concept_211205f.jpg

[nelsig]

Another update

I don't know if the fisrt running soldier must be scaled up

Thanks for the feedback

http://www.nelsig.ch/cgtalk/Soldat_concept_211205g.jpg

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