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kira-hime
11-29-2005, 06:18 AM
This is my concept sketch which has been approved but for a few minor things that need tweaking. All the background shading was done very fast for this sketch, as the character was the main focus. Any crits on anatomy, shading, colors would be much appreciated! :D

http://img209.imageshack.us/img209/905/baroncopy1qx.jpg

Thanks! :bounce:

vinegaria
11-29-2005, 02:13 PM
i like the general concept and the mood, i think it might work ok.. but as long as perspective is fine and colours quite undersaturated but specific i think what ruins the whole pic are anatomy mistakes..

the head is too small, same as feet and his arms seem to wide.. this way he looks more caricatural than heroic in my opinion.. i did some quick adjustments so you can see what i meant:

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v311/vinegar/wippopr.jpg

actually here the head i drew is a bit too big and it's not the best anatomy too, but i hope it will help you to see what needs to be fixed a little bit..

hope it helped :)

kira-hime
11-29-2005, 07:30 PM
Thanks, I thought the head was a little small. I thought about leaving it that way though, cause (sorry I didn't mention this before) this is actually the antagonist of the story in a way. He's supposed to look "shady."

I'll post another wip later tonight.

Edit: and here it is; these are mostly just the changes the author wanted to have done, although I did make the head bigger. What do you think?

http://img212.imageshack.us/img212/5305/baroncopy21qp.jpg

kira-hime
12-10-2005, 08:00 AM
Working on the background now, will post another update in the morning, but I need input on the position of the club he's holding, it seems to be unnatural since the pose was originally designed for the first, shorter club. I can't seem to find a better pose for it though; any suggestions?

kira-hime
12-10-2005, 11:29 AM
Update!

http://img226.imageshack.us/img226/6351/baronwip15kj.jpg

vinegaria
12-10-2005, 03:48 PM
i think it definitely looks much, much better now. and the overal mood is coming out really great!

kira-hime
12-16-2005, 12:59 PM
Another update. This is due in just a couple days so I'd really appreciate some feedback.

http://img211.imageshack.us/img211/5613/baronwip3preview6lk.jpg

kira-hime
01-08-2006, 07:00 PM
On the off chance someone might actually comment...

http://img262.imageshack.us/img262/5499/baronwip4preview7gw.jpg

Solothores
01-08-2006, 07:41 PM
Hi Kira,

I like your work. This picture clearly is on the right track to establish a sincere mood. :thumbsup: I l especially like the colours you used. There is a lot potential in this work. Though, there is also room for improvement. Read my feedback below for some subjective observations.

Cheers
Solo



xxxxxx

Feedback:

As Vinegaria already mentioned, there are some perspective and anatomic problems.

Try to use a perspective line grid for the room, since it feels off.

Your anatagonist looks like he is missing a neck. And the proportions are off compared to the size of the chest. His right booth kinda feels too big, his leg a bit too short.

Try to stand in that pose you created. The pose feels a bit unnatural. This could be because of his right leg that rests before/sidewards to the chair.

Shaft of the Spears in the background needs more mass and the guards are too small based on the dimensions your room setup implies.

The wall in the background feels a bit flat. Try to give them more volume. Also try to bring more variance into those splices and forms, that wall just looks too clean and regular.

The straw on the ground feels flat, add some volume.

Try to add more light / shadows. Since the illumination is pretty high in your room. Based on the oil-lights.

kira-hime
01-08-2006, 08:35 PM
Solotheres: Thanks so much for your in-depth comments! I'm absolutely horrid when it comes to perspective; I can't seem to 'get' it. I'll play around with that and the proportions and post another update soon.

I need help on the face as well, since this is basically my first one, and the author feels it needs more detail. Any ideas?

Again, thanks! ^_^

icknick
01-09-2006, 09:47 AM
I really like the pic the only thing I can think about the face is it might need some more of a vaule range. I dont see any real black in there. just a thought.
Keep up the good work.

~Nick

Pixelcritter
01-09-2006, 02:50 PM
It's lookin good. My suggestion would be to add some highlights to the left side of his body from whatever light you have comming from over there.

kira-hime
01-16-2006, 06:36 AM
Face in progress -- obviously will add irises soon, but does the skin and detail/anatomy look okay so far?

http://img15.imageshack.us/img15/1535/baronfacewip17dl.jpg

Pixelcritter
01-16-2006, 06:53 AM
face looks good to me. only thing I think looks kinda weird is the hair. The hair itself is good but it just looks like its sitting on his head like Donald Trump's. Try and make the hair look like its a part of his head and not a separate piece.

kira-hime
01-16-2006, 07:02 AM
Thanks for the comment ;) The hair hasn't really been worked on much at this point, but I'll reintegrate it into the scalp complete with shadows asap :)

kira-hime
01-17-2006, 11:41 PM
been working on it a bit more (still haven't done much with the hair, sorry). I feel like his facial structure is going all wonky but I'm not sure quite how to fix it, everything I do to it seems to make it worse.
http://img72.imageshack.us/img72/6356/baronfacewip27rl.jpg

hpslashluvr
01-18-2006, 07:23 AM
lips aren't centered quite right, just use the little indent under the nose to center it.

also the hair needs to go actually into the scalp instead of having an obvious line where it starts and ends...maybe just paint a darker skin color and then paint hair over so it already has the shadows.

also the skin could use some warmer colors to liven it up, it's sort of a dull brown right now.

i think with some more dramatic lighting the pic would be a lot better. you can do this manually or just set some lights up in your program.

kira-hime
02-03-2006, 01:17 PM
small update, messing with the pose and giving some better lighting...

http://img133.imageshack.us/img133/1711/baronwip68qs.jpg

kira-hime
02-14-2006, 12:58 AM
what do you guys think? does it look like it could go on the cover of a book?

http://img131.imageshack.us/img131/999/baronfinal9xp.jpg

slickgreekgeo
02-14-2006, 02:27 AM
Great work, maybe you could go even further with the lightning effects and details. The composition is superb, and will work well for a book cover.

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