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yulias
11-28-2005, 04:34 AM
Just started this today. the idea has been rotting in my brain for quite some time :D let me know what you think, any crits are much appreciated.

http://img33.imageshack.us/img33/7863/sketch2a0ib.jpg (http://imageshack.us)


latest:
http://img332.imageshack.us/img332/2966/prgress8fz.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

hpslashluvr
11-28-2005, 07:36 AM
i love the idea. i think the purple dude is really distracting though...put him in a different place maybe.

Mu
11-28-2005, 10:23 AM
i think the purple dude is really distracting though...put him in a different place maybe.


:scream: lol... reads like "a different room, outside the pic". I have the feeling that I miss something about the idea behind this pic and the "purple dude". I am sorry for that, would not be the first time for me neither.

But if he is to stay there I strongly recommend giving him a t-shirt which says "purple dude":scream:

looking forward to any explanation on this compo and do apologize for not getting it

yulias
12-01-2005, 01:07 AM
http://img394.imageshack.us/img394/3803/sketch33ou.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

Ill move mr.purple when i figure out why, exactly, he walked onto my picture :p. he wasnt in the original idea. if you have any ideas on where he should go, or anything about the composition, let me know :D

Mu
12-01-2005, 08:34 AM
ok, let's forget about him for a minute (though it takes some effort!)I really like the facial expression and the pose of the female character.

Looks like a fifties icon!

I think the folds on her robe imply a twist in her upper torso which she is actually not making.

Concentrate on her. Maybe PurpleDude will eventually get that he does not belong:D

yulias
12-03-2005, 06:40 PM
http://img263.imageshack.us/img263/4879/sketch4a5vk.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

mr.purple aint leaving :p. i took your advice on the dress, im going to put her into a 1920's-1950's style thingy (because they knew how to dress), perferably with frills... once i find an appropriate refrence. i did some work on the skin and changed the clothing and arm. any other glaring errors?

mybutterflyiris
12-03-2005, 07:30 PM
The problem with purple dude is he competes with the woman for attention from the viewer...and currently he is winning. In other words, he seems to be the focal point. Like, I glance up at the girl and the lamp, but ultimately my eyes rest on him. So you need to decide what your focus is and change your composition accordingly... as is, the composition's just not working in my opinion.

Primo_itch
12-03-2005, 08:34 PM
Am i the only one that really enjoy the purple dude ? If something is that surreal, it cant be bad :p

Mu
12-03-2005, 08:58 PM
I just took a look at your other threads and do have a better understanding for purpleDude, now.

btw, "I hate your poetry" is simply hilarious and fantastic!

Back to talking with the lamp. Let's assume you need purpleDude. Then the composition is missing something. Ask yourslef the things the viewer will ask himself.

- why is he sad?
- does he belong to her?
- what is their relationship?
- who the hell is he, anyway?

There is an element missing which explains his existence - if you can find it, everything which is a problem now (him being in the foreground while she is lit, the discrepancy between her and his appearance in general) will even benefit from it and add to the picture as a whole.

Sermon over...:scream:

ajay1589
12-03-2005, 09:38 PM
mr purple could be balancing an ash tray on his head...that way he'd serve a purpose :)

although it is supposed to be a dark room...it looks way to dark at the moment(so dark that its boring)

Mu
12-04-2005, 02:32 PM
man the thing with the ash tray is bang on the money!

yulias
12-27-2005, 02:07 AM
ash tray it is!

appearently some time in the past little slave boys ran around with ash trays on their heads --> not sure how true, but fancy

http://img230.imageshack.us/img230/9687/prgress6gz.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

shadows and what not to be added

Squibbit
12-27-2005, 03:33 AM
weird idea and great mood i like this pic!



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paperclip
12-27-2005, 03:47 AM
This is like a blend of barbar and 50s advertisement.


I am confused.......in a good way. Please continue.

yulias
12-28-2005, 10:44 PM
http://img332.imageshack.us/img332/2966/prgress8fz.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

its coming ever so slowly. im going to have to do something about that table...

jnurp
01-02-2006, 09:28 AM
I there, I really like the mood and the strange idea but something's weird in her anatomy is a bit off
in fact her left arm is a bit strange, it looks like there is no bones in the forearm and that the elbow is bended even if it's a hard part, and the biceps is supposed to be inflated in this pose

the right arm...I think that the forearm is a bit too short

enjoy :)

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