The Girl Or The Sword

[Pylon]

Wow, that's fun, and good technique too!

It's a nice concept, he's looking at the sword, but the interaction between him and the sword is obvious. Rather nice. Is there some way to bring a relationship between the girl and sword? So we understand that he can't have both, or something like that? The lighting was very interesting to see.

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[Elsie]

I agree with Pylon about the sword.

I love your style! Really nice work :thumbsup: the girl looks awesome. I think the guys face could use a bit more work though, it looks a little flat.

Looking forward to seeing this finished!

[authentic]

Beautiful. Nice mood. Congratulations.

[Ilikesoup]

It looks really beautiful so far. I like the look of concern on the girl's face, showing that she's aware of the decision he's trying to make. Having her eyes closed, we might think he's thinking about killing her. :surprised Nice decision putting her in the light and him in the dark. Only suggestion I'd make is to put them in a room somewhere ("Hey, you two. Get a room!") to show that he's thinking of leaving comfort and the company of a beautiful woman to go off to battle. Maybe a nice set of curtains would do. Not saying the picture needs it, but it's just an idea. :shrug:

Oh, I just noticed the drawstring on her pants is defying gravity.

[斑雲]

I like it, but there is one thing....

I know you are probably trying to show the differences between the light and dark side, but it bothers me that there are parts where the line is super thick and then others where the line is almost non-existance. Of course, there should be some line-width variations, but I don't think they should be quite so dramatic...

[THECLYKE]

OK

HMMMM...THANKS FOR THE FEED BACK ON THIS.
I GOT STUCK AND I WAS HAVING SOME PROBLEMS
IDENTIFING WHAT WAS NEEDED.


VINCET-THANKS MAN

PYLON AND ELSIE-
Is there some way to bring a relationship
between the girl and sword?

WELL WHEN I WAS DRAWING THESE CHARACTERS
I WAS MAKING THINGS UP WHILE I MOVED ALONG.
THEY HAVE A WEIRD REALATIONSHIP...THE GUY
HAS A BROTHER WHO IS OLDER AND NOW KING. WHY,
WELL........ THE TRUE KING (THE YOUNG GUY)
WAS SAID TO BE SLAIN IN A BATTLE HIS BROTHER
PRESURED HIM TO FIGHT IN ONE YEAR AGO.
(I WATCH ALOT OF OPERA)
WHAT HAPPENED TO THE YOUNG KING YOU SAY..
WELL HE WAS CAPTURED......BUT HE ESCAPED FROM THE
ENEMY.JUST TO FIND OUT THAT ANYBODY POSING AS THE
YOUNG KING WOULD BE KILLED DUE TO A LAW THE NEW KING
HAD MADE.
SO HERES WERE THE GIRL COMES IN....SHE WORKS AT
A LOCAL INN AS A BARTENDER WHO GETS ALOT OF TIPS.
SHE ALWAYS HAD A CRUSH ON THE YOUNG KING
THINKING ONE DAY HER LOVE MIGHT NOTICE HER IN THE
MARKET PLACE OF THE KINGDOM.WHEN THE NEWS OF
THE YOUNG KING BEING SLAIN HAD REACH HER TOWN....
SHE BECAME SOOO DISTROT THAT SHE PLANED TO KILL
HERSELF WITH HER FATHERS SWORD IN AN ALLEYWAY
WHERE IT WAS SAID THAT HER FATHER USED THAT VERY
SWORD TO SAVE THE QUEEN (THE YOUNG KINGS MOTHER)
FROM TRAITORS OF THE TRONE.....
WOW ALOT OF HISTORY.....
NOW, THE GIRLS FATHER WAS PROMISED THAT IF HIS WIFE
GAVE BIRTH TO A DAUGHTER AND SHE WAS BEAUTIFUL...
AND RASIED WORTHY OF ROYAL NATURE..THEN SHE WOULD MARRY
ONE OF HER SONS. BUT THE QUEEN DIED GIVING BIRTH TO HER
SON (THE YOUNG KING).....THAT IS WHY THE OLDER BROTHER
HATES THE YOUNG GUY......
OK...NOW THE ALLEY WAY IS WHERE THEY MEET....SHE WAS
SINGING A VERY SAD LAMENT FOR HIM. AND THATS THAT...
THEY MEET UP.......OK
WOW...ANY BODY LOST?

NOW THE IMAGE IS BASED ON THE CONVERSATION THE
TWO OF THEM HAVE.SHE BELEIVES THAT HIS MOTHER
HAS KEPT HER END OF THE BARGEN BY LEADING THE
KING TO HER FROM THE GRAVE.....IN SOME WERID WAY.
SHE WANTS HIM TO FORGIVE HIS BROTHER AND LEAVE THE
TRONE TO HIM....AND RUN OFF AND LIVE A QUIET PESANT
LIFE.HE ON THE OTHER HAND WANTS VENGENCE FOR HIS
BROTHERS EVIL PLOT TO HAVE HIM KILLED.....
HIS BROTHER IS A TYRANT AND A WARMONGER.HIS BROTHER
WILL BRING ONLY WAR AND RAGE TO HIS PROUD AND HUMBLE
KINGDOM.HE MOST FIGHT......BUT HE HAS NEVER SEEN SOMEONE
SO BEAUTIFUL AND DEVOTED TO HIM IN HIS LIFE.

I'LL STOP THERE....FOR NOW
SO PYLON .... I'M THINKING UMMM I NEED HELP ON THAT ONE?


CHRIS- I HOPE I CAN CALL YOU THAT
"put them in a room"
I THINK YOUR RIGHT BUT I LIKE THEM THERE MAYBE I SHOULD DD SOME
BRICKS ...JUST TO CATURE THE FACT THAT THERE IN THE ALLWAY..
WHAT DO YOU THINK NOW THAT YOU SEE WHAT THE STORY IS
IF YOU READ IT? AND THEY JUST MET....UNLIKE OUR SOCIETY WHERE
YOU MEET SOMEONE AND BOOM THE GIRL IS PREGNANT THEY ARE MORE SHY.
HUGGING TO THEM IS LIKE $@%&# ($@%&#*...LOL....UMM...YEAH.....I'M)*...LOL....UMM...YEAH.....I'M GETTING KICKED OFF
CGTALK FOR THAT COMENT...LOL

[Euphrosyne]

This is really a nice painting. I really like the figures, costumes, composition and the colors. I believe that it would be even better if you added some more of the red from her hair somewhere else in the picture. Maybe in her costume or the background. Keep going this is really worth it.

[Ilikesoup]

I like when artists put this much thought into their characters. :)

Anyway, in light of your story I see two scenes. As the two characters meet in the alleyway they are both in cloaks. The rightful heir to the throne, thought dead by his brother, wears a cloak to conceal his identity aware that his discovery could mean his life is forfeit. The barmaid wears a cloak to conceal her father's sword with which she intends to kill herself. She knows that if she's captured with a sword in her hand she will be imprisoned or perhaps executed by the royal guard. The two meet, either by fate or by random circumstance, but both become aware that they might share some common destiny. Understanding their peril, the girl whispers, "We cannot be seen here. I know a place we can go."

She ushers him to a storeroom seldom used by the bar owner. There are boards over the window but light streams through the spaces in between. The pair remove their cloaks and discuss their reasons for being there and their mutual hatred for the pretender king. She urges the prince to leave this foul city and to make a new life elsewhere. He speaks of his duty to depose his brother and to lead his people as his father had wanted. He renews his promise to the young barmaid that once his quest is done that they will be wed. She urges him to reconsider his quest, but he cannot be swayed.

I don't know if that helps, but the second scene is what I imagine when I see your picture. Let's say it inspired me to write that. And yeah, you can call me Chris. :thumbsup:

[THECLYKE]

I like when artists put this much thought into their characters. :)

Anyway, in light of your story I see two scenes. As the two characters meet in the alleyway they are both in cloaks. The rightful heir to the throne, thought dead by his brother, wears a cloak to conceal his identity aware that his discovery could mean his life is forfeit. The barmaid wears a cloak to conceal her father's sword with which she intends to kill herself. She knows that if she's captured with a sword in her hand she will be imprisoned or perhaps executed by the royal guard. The two meet, either by fate or by random circumstance, but both become aware that they might share some common destiny. Understanding their peril, the girl whispers, "We cannot be seen here. I know a place we can go."

She ushers him to a storeroom seldom used by the bar owner. There are boards over the window but light streams through the spaces in between. The pair remove their cloaks and discuss their reasons for being there and their mutual hatred for the pretender king. She urges the prince to leave this foul city and to make a new life elsewhere. He speaks of his duty to depose his brother and to lead his people as his father had wanted. He renews his promise to the young barmaid that once his quest is done that they will be wed. She urges him to reconsider his quest, but he cannot be swayed.

I don't know if that helps, but the second scene is what I imagine when I see your picture. Let's say it inspired me to write that. And yeah, you can call me Chris. :thumbsup:

WOW CHRIS....HAHA

THANKS FOR THE HUGE FEED BACK......I FEEL LIKE THIS IS DEVELOPING INTO SUMTHIN..
DON'T KNOW WHAT THOUGH.....LOL.

BACK TO WORK
I'LL UPDATE SOON

THANKS FOR THE FEED BACK EUPHROSYNE

I'M THINKING OF CREATING A 3D VERSION OF THIS IMAGE.....FOR A SHORT FILM OR SUMTHIN.....

[umbrellasky]

Nice work! Everyone else seems to have said pretty much what I'd would like to say. This is a really nice pic just the girls expression that bugs me a little, like what the others said about her not looking like she is connected with the sword. Maybe after you finish this you could do another sketch? I'm not saying this is a bad sketch, I really like it, especially the lighting. It's just your story linked with Ilikesoup's contribution would make an even better picture!

Really nice work I look forward to seeing more updates :thumbsup:

[THECLYKE]

Wow...i Think I Will Try Another Sketch Of It...it's Worth The Try
Besides I'm Kinda Thinkin Theres Alot Of Mistakes With This One...

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