Spectacular 2D Entry: Alwyn Talbot

[Neubius]

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wow, intimidating brief! ok im thinking flying bikes, sky scapers and some sort of persuit craft.. really big craft. hopefully you'll be able to tell what's going on on the next sketch.

[Neubius]

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working out some of the elements. probably just putting off starting the finished piece.....

[yAdam]

Excellent movement in the first sketch! I like it. Will be cool to see how you go with the background. Looking forward to more updates:)

[MoonVisionStudio]

Excellent bike concept!

[Neubius]

cheers :) got all the details worked out now i think. great time for my scanner to die on me. hopefully update tommorow......

[Neubius]

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more sketches must post composition...

[Neubius]

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ready to start now i think.....

[Rudeone]

Wow that's looking great man! I like your concept a lot, could be very dramatic, definitly spectacular!
I think it would be cool if there was more traffic, also a lot more traffic beneath the main scene would be cool I think, you know like those scenes in Coruscant from Star Wars.
BTW are those crafts behind the characters supposed to be chasing cops or something? that would be really cool IMO

[Neubius]

yeah, cops ( glad you could tell )
more traffic>> thanks good idea man.

[Neubius]

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finaly making a start on the colour...

[Neubius]

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concentrating on details to much...

[Neubius]

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still not sure

[Korline]

doing really good, youv'e some nice designs there, very dynamic pic, keep it up :bounce:
cheers :twisted:

[Fahrija]

cool concept and design. :thumbsup: The line drawing is excellent.


Maybe it could be good to desaturate the background a little bit to accentuate the foreground scene more. Things seem to melt together currently. Just an impression.




fahrija


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[agent bone]

I really like this concept. I agree with fahriga. Focus most of your detail and value on the foreground to make it pop out. Keep going:thumbsup:

[Lync]

Great concept. It's kinda like a cross between the matrix and 5th Element. very dynamic and full of energy. I am looking forward to seeing more of this.

[Neubius]

ill be doing all of the above : ) thanks! Really helpfull. also once theres more detail in id like to really play around with focus/ bluring.

some really good entries, should be top challenge this one!

[Neubius]

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definatley not spectacular...need another element......

[2xbo]

Hi Neubius. Looks interesting your paint.
I'll keep one eye in your project.

xbo :scream:

[Neubius]

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thinking of changing composition slightly, need more scale....

[Neubius]

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making a bit of a mess, good job got 2 months left...

[Lync]

Hi again, I think I prefer the previous composition because the viewer is closer to the action and it seems more intense. But that's just my humble opinion. :)

[Neubius]

thanks , really enjoying it. would be nice to have more time to work on it!

btw just checked your entry, really nice - particulaly like the textureing and light.
A

[Lync]

thanks , really enjoying it. would be nice to have more time to work on it!

btw just checked your entry, really nice - particulaly like the textureing and light.
A

I know the feeling. More time would be great to work on our pieces, but I hope you don't give up because it is a great concept and great art. Just keep plugging at it and don't get discouraged. It is worth it!

[Neubius]

absolutley, doing this one mostly on my lunch hours :/
ill try and do some serious work on it over the weekend !

[Neubius]

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nearly got all the elements in. hoping to work into the overall look-depth etc soon....

[walrus]

Wow, there is sure a lot of excitement in your piece. I have to confess, I have an easier time reading your earlier color-in-progress version. The colors are flatter and the silhouettes are very clear. At this point, there's a lot of noise everywhere, and with the exception of the explosion, everything comes off as a pretty similar. But i don't know what you have planned as you progress: Some almospheric hazing could help place the more back-ground elements into the background...? Anyhow, good luck with it!

-mike

[Ducklator]

hey.. this image is like a movie that I saw time ago, but I can't remember the name...:D
nice concept... keep it up!

[Neubius]

wish i knew which film too, hope it was a good one :/
Hazing > yeah definatley, once ive got all the elements in im going to do a load of experiments with colour , contrast etc,
im thinking at the minute that all the extreme background should be very bleached out ? opinions more than welcome :)

cheers,
A

[Neubius]

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flipped the whole thing, i think it reads alot better this way. left to right seems to flow better. still need to adress over all balance and contrast, to noisy :/ ... need to do other traffic etc .....

[Neubius]

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need to start adding traffic....

[Neubius]

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having fun with the details, still much to do

[Neubius]

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keep working in to details :/

[Neubius]

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still long way to go

[Neubius]

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still got composition problems.....

[Neubius]

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it just wasn't spectacular. So i reckon some cops with ridulculas lasers hanging out the car windows blasting up the place might add to it. ( ?? )

[HamsterFly]

Cool design man ! keep it up!:thumbsup:

[Neubius]

Hi again, I think I prefer the previous composition because the viewer is closer to the action and it seems more intense. But that's just my humble opinion. :)

sorry, i kept meaning to say > your absolutley right, thanks. Im going to try and adress that with with some new bits.

also, the details on your peice are excellent!

[rawwad]

Hey man, Great working here! I like idea which you coloring, but there isn´t fantastic style like this last update. Cop looks fantastic, great style and design, keep this way :thumbsup:

[cLos71]

Very cool design on the cop. Looking forward to seeing more!

[MrFreeman]

:thumbsup: Hi Alwyn

I really like the cop design - lots of depth and great lighting.

I prefer this from the larger composition - which has some great details, but needs that depth you've catured so well in the latest image. Maybe it's just that the later image is slightly simpler and easier to understand.

Great work and look forward to seeing how this develops.....always good to see other UK creatives taking part in the challenge

:bounce: :applause:

[MrFreeman]

:) sorry...don't want to take up all your thread....

on second thoughts.....you could increase the scale of the woman and bring her more into the foreground, so it looks like she isn't touching the police car behind. Putting a little more space between would make all the difference and I really like the overall composition.

Hope I'm not waffling toooooo much (please ignore this reply if I am) :thumbsup:

[Neubius]

many thanks for for ideas, really apreciate it, ill have a crack at all of the above.


hamsterfly, rawwad, cLos71 > made my day :) thanks

[Neubius]

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still working into details :/ overall image still needs lots of work....

[Neubius]

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ok! about to add the cops with big lasers, should liven things up a bit...and justify the explosion

[Neubius]

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well, running out of time....so im going to add more details :/ hmmmm

[Neubius]

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more detail

[Neubius]

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still need to work on overall balance..

[Vectorius]

Hello Neubius!! a lot of effetcs in your compo! that's fine..but maybe try to blur or decontrast someone...too much thing jumps me to the eyes. Like the cops car on background, maybe decontrast it..and do the same thing to the building on background...it's just my personnal opinion, maybe that can help you..maybe not..anyway that's a good work Neubius..keep goin'on and good luck!:thumbsup:

[Neubius]

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for some reason i cant get round to adding detail to the guy :/ .
think the rain helps tho, still not sure overall.

[Norberg]

There´s a whole lot going on in this pic! Great action!
The composition works well, however the colorcheme makes it hard to read. You could try some atmospheric effects and lower the contrasts in the background. And why not the classic blue far background.
The rain is a nice touch but as it is now it makes the image even harder to read. You could try some lighter rain.
Looking forward to see how this develops.

[Neubius]

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still working in...

[Neubius]

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[Neubius]

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goint to try out all you good peoples' suggestions now.
running out of time !

:)

[FrozZT]

Hi!
Your image looks intense! I think a problem would be that it is too busy maybe.. In my opinion you should really skip the rain! It just doesnt work for me and it doesnt look very good compared to other elements you've painted.. + If it is raining there should be dark clouds above and becouse of that your lighting wont be believable! Do some anti-raindance or somethin!

My tip to you would be, skip the rain and focus on polishing the elements that is already there!

Good luck!

[Neubius]

ha, really? i was thinking it was starting to hold the image together. I was adressing Fiolkas' piont about the saterdation, kind of thought it was working...

No worries, i'll try a few alteratives, see what happens. : )
cheers,
A

[Neubius]

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going to stretch out his arm some more, also i think maybe you should see his face
...?

[Neubius]

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seems to colourful, must do more tests...

[Neubius]

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finally coming together i think. decided to put the rain back in, ive allways felt heavy rain can be quite dramatic.

nearly done any way, few more experiments. Though weather it's actually spectacular is anyones guess !

[NinjaA55N]

great pic! Only one thing that I would like to point out.. the pic is quite the same tone level all over the place I think. So maybe u could darken some places that r not so importance for understaning this piece or maybe just do some playing with curves. good luck!

[Neubius]

your absolutley right , thanks. trying to sort out that now. AND trying not to add more details..... but am doing anyway :/

cheers,
A

[Neubius]

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slowly balancing the thing out, starting to come together. few more details in...

[Neubius]

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getting there i think... still needs something...

[Neubius]

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After realising that every human being is being born in to slavery and that you accumilate debt by your very existense, they race to the records facility where they can plant a bug and wipe out all records of debt and effectively set the world free.... or something.

[Fahrija]

Hi Neubius,

I like the result of your entry very much. An action packed concept wich definetely conveyes a spectacular feeling. I can sense the dynamic of the moment grabbing each others hands.


Just a single comment if you don´t mind. I would modify the lasers a bit because in my opinion they look to much like in old times (buck rogers, war of the worlds) If you make them thiner with a deep blue and bright lighning > they would look much more sharp and dangerous. (for example like martiniere does them) - Additionally they would not divide your image to much into several pieces. Just my two cents


Congrats to your image.

regards
fahrija

[rawwad]

Nice work I like your action pic, fantastic idea,characters and style.

Keep it and good luck with judgging! :thumbsup:

[Neubius]

rawwad> thanks man, apreciate it. !

fahrija> ill give it a go many thanks for pointers!

[Fish-KAart]

:thumbsup: Spectacularing and impressing it has turned out! The excellent ending! It really corresponds to a theme! You the interesting artist! I congratulate and wish victories! Success! its-Cool!:bounce:

[NinjaA55N]

bravo! It looks really good and all those details really do their job well. But.. what happened to the Police signs??? did u flipped the image or something? hehe ;) good luck!

[Neubius]

thanks all very much : ) really enjoyed being a part of this big groovy thing !

(police signs> i figure they are flipped for reading in rear view mirrors )

very greatful for all the pointers along the way, merry christmas to all of yooz!

Neubius

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