Demo Reel Critique (please!)

[pluMmet]

your animation (character motion) isn't bad, a little more work and it will be great. However your character rigging (deformations) are on the verge of terrible. And I liked your flash stuff!

keep it up, you can only get better!:bounce:

[stephen2002]

looking pretty good. The motions are nice and smooth, however there is a lot of pinching and other issues with the rigging.

Also, you really need to pay much more attention to object clipping. I was able to spot a rather large number of spots were things either went all of the way through or partially through other things.

That end frame where you list your software experience should be much longer.

[Slicknic]

It seems a lillte slow I would work on timming and Weight.
What do you currently do in the game industry?

[MikaelPersson]

Listen to the other posters opinions.
Then I´ll add my thoughts.
Choose maybe two or three of those clips. Or maybe just the first fighting sequence.
Then concentrate on making the animation in just those few clips really good. No one is interested in seeing to many badly animated clips. Anyone can pose characters in time and do bad CG animation. But finding weight and timing in a clip is hard and takes time.

How long have you spent on the animation in each clip?

My suggestion would be to single in on your fighting sequence and make it shine. Scrap everything else.

ok. Now I´ve been brutally honest, hope it helps.

:wavey:

[Kireblade]

Thanks a lot for the feedback, it's been very helpful as I've been reanimating a lot of my stuff and dropping much of my older stuff (it's obvious that it's chronological, latest being first).

Do you think the first piece can be reworked, or should I drop that as well? I'm up for suggestions that would make it better.

[MikaelPersson]

The first piece has potential. But you need to devote a lot more time to polish it. Right now it looks ok, but still to much like boring CG animation.
Look at it as a good rough animation. A detailed breakdown would take to long time. Try it out and upload the new animation, then we can give you further suggestions.

:wavey:

[Stevo]

You have some solid work on there, although the demo is
way too long. Remember, quality pieces over quantity. I suggest
you take it down to a minute long > the dialog sequence, the
gamey fight sequence, the fence texturing piece, the bulldozer,
and all your traditional stuff. I think the other stuff takes away
from those pieces. I did the same thing on my demo, and I plan
to cut it in half soon:)

Its looking good, keep it up!

[digitaldamage]

Maybe it´s just me, but get rid of the texture animation for the logo right at the beginning. The first thought i had was something like: "ARRGH! Max default procedural map!"
If you absolutely want to show an animation for a logo, make sure it is really really really really good.

I don´t know if you are looking for an "animation only" job, so take the following with a grain of salt ( If this is the case, simply ignore the rest).
The lighting in scene one, four, five and six could be improved quite a bit. Namely the abscence of shadows in parts is irritating. Moreover, in some of these scenes, textures on the caracters are nonexistant or not visible. Thereby it looks a bit flat.

Hope that helps a bit.

[lordofmaya]

hey kireblade,

you've definitely put in some hard work there , man. I appreciate all your efforts. But the characters n stuff r a bit too dull in colour and so is the animation in flash n the other stuff. The fridge scene was pretty good though. the fight scene between those two wrestlers needs a bit of better colouring n it is also too blurry at times.

keep up the good work dude. all the best !

:thumbsup:

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