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moush
06-02-2005, 10:53 AM
Hey these are 2 of my 10 second entries....

This one's from last month...

http://www.abhimation.com/moush/7203.mpg

N this one's from Feb....

http://www.cgtantra.com//forum/uploads/abhishek/avatars/7203.mpg

Please feel free to critique them!!! Thanx........ :)
MattVogt
06-03-2005, 10:00 PM
Hi great start! read this (http://www.keithlango.com/tutorials/old/popThru/popThru.html) (again)

#1) I like the "even they have to pay taxes" head shake. Earlier on there's just too much arm movement.. it's a big beginner mistake called pantomining. Practice not just moving the lips that's only half the work - it's called facesyncing not lipsyncing! Don't want to insult you but subconsiously it reminds me of a character wwho's stuck chest down in a block of ice. Act this out; put some story into your actions pose poses that tell that story etc etc once again great start!

#2) Excellent followthrough on his fingers! He moves around alot for no reason it's like every thing he said is gestured. Write down the words stand up and act it out right from the script

-When I to first started my gesturing (http://www.mattvogt.com/art/animation/goodbad/good-bad.mov)was like yours
pollywoggles
06-04-2005, 03:53 AM
I like how you overlapped the hands. Looks like you have a lot of twinning going on.
moush
06-04-2005, 09:07 AM
Thanx a lot Matt & Paul...

Matt I understand what your trying 2 say...helps me quite a lot..thanx again...I ll think of a concept, act it out n make the required changes...:)

About the other 1...yeah i did feel it was a bit 2 much overacting....maybe i shud jus do some subtle gestures without 2 much of body movement...
Loulu79
06-04-2005, 06:29 PM
Aie, I prefer the second one...The first one to me wasn't in sync with the mood of the line "Everybody has to pay taxes..." This voice has so much apathy and smoldering anger...So you better work on that. But the latest one is much, much more in tune ...
Chris Bacon
06-07-2005, 06:27 PM
Nice....quick and fluid.....needs more between the gesters though
moush
06-08-2005, 01:37 PM
The first one to me wasn't in sync with the mood of the line "Everybody has to pay taxes..." This voice has so much apathy and smoldering anger...So you better work on that.

Hey thanx lou...ur rite I ll work on the xpressions 2 establish the angry mood of the character....

N thanx chris....though would u elaborate a litle more on where I need 2 have sum more betweens....
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