The Girl next door

[Nazirull]

Good start! It has this bright hue to it....thus to me it looks a bit flat..unless thats wut u want to achieve.

oh i forgot....its WIP *slaphead*

[TryForce]

lol np ^^
Anyway it ok if you crit it like that because im pretty new to coloring Humans. So its like my 3rd time of doing that :)

i hope i can update it pretty soon when i come back home.


fast update:
http://img87.echo.cx/img87/6280/dream22aj.jpg

[Squibbit]

yo hey nice start, I'll try and give a few comments and
then u can say if they're worth anything :) :

The right arm looks a bit thinner than the left.
Also the left foot looks a biit too large , maybe it's
just cause the heel curves outward oddly and
the lower leg looks too even-thick.
The toes on the right foot look a bit too long
and the area between the left boob and the
left shoulder seems not lit right, am I right,
what u think ?

[TryForce]

well the right arm isnt thinner at all it just may looks like that because i had shaded it bad. its supposed to be bit more far away. about the boob... hmm well may ur right ... ill go and check it... ill try to fix it abit ;)

otherwise thank you for crit it because its usefull now ill try to fix it fast ^^

thanks

[TryForce]

http://img35.echo.cx/img35/1725/dream23yt.jpg

^^...1.2.3.4.5.6.7.8.9.10.

[Noiram]

I think that squibbit is right about the right arm it is to thin. I know it receeds in space but that much. The right arm also looks like it is reaching to scratch her back, not running her fingers through her hair. I don't know if this was the intent or not.
The hip seems wrong as the left knee bend the right should be elevated to retain balance. Though this is being done to some extent because of perspective, more might be needed.
The feet propotions seem fine but they also should follow perspective.
Good work so far.

[TryForce]

well heré s the basic ref i used: http://image01.otto.de/pool/formatb/432023.jpg

.... so would u crit her O_o" ???

[Noiram]

Your pic. is very low res but here are are several things that differ from your wip

rt shoulder lower bending down to meet hip.
neg space around face and rt arm is wrong
rt arm to rubbery, note how the extra mass helps alter the ultimate destination of the hidden hand.
upper body more in profile in the photo
follow the line of her jeans more to elevate rt hip
clothes need more mass, the shirt more so than the pants
rt foot lookes like you are seeing more of it in the photo unlike the profile you have described in your work.

remember also that the lens of a camera tends to warp objects especially towards the edges

[TryForce]

ouououuuuuu yoo r talkin so pro that i cant follow yo O_O" sry... well what i get is :

More mass on the clothes... deform the body abit... make the right arm bigger and uhmm.... yeah more i dont get X-x"

[Squibbit]

man, u getting some detailed comments here, haha, hope u don't mind :)


here's mine :

-the reference u posted is rather blurry, but as i think posted already, the
brown arrows shows where I think to add in the right arm area
- the dark blue arrow shows where i just painted over with the color
to make it look flatter, as in the photo
-same with the light blue arrow
-#1 arrow shows where i think u should add some curve and darken the
area a bit
-#2 shows where i painted over with a color to make it look again more
like in the pic in my opinion
-#3 shows where i would cut the leg above the heel, cause it never curves
outward , does it? Once again the reference pic is a bit blurry here, but when u feel
your own leg you should realize this

how's that ?


http://www.saunalahti.fi/panuom/TryForce_Edit_1.jpg

[TryForce]

wow,thanks dudde! that helped alot... ill fix that asap.

erm dude i like to ask again near the neck at the hair.. there is something... isnt it the hand? or do i see it wrong?

[Blue-demon]

Yea, that's a hand holding back her hair. Erm the reference as tanned skin.

[Nazirull]

Thats what i wouldve told you (rrriiiiiiigght!)...

Yeap..those areas are definitely it.

Add a slight softness to the posture by adding the crumple line at the upper abdomen. that like can accentuate the pose more....(i think)

Great work man! Get the skin to tone and ure done.....with the skin tone....:rolleyes:

[TryForce]

http://img228.echo.cx/img228/3756/girlcopy1xo.jpg

Ok, well i fixed fastly the prporations and now i will go for fixing the skin tone also then after i finished the skin tone ill go for adding the hand at the hair and then ill finish the face ^^

but it may taked long because i will have school and stuff... well any similar crits so far?

[Squibbit]

hey pretty good , i'd still curve the the ankle above the heel inward more, but yea,
good work :thumbsup:

[Nazirull]

Other than just some shading issues...i think everything is great....:thumbsup: .

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