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ProfesorFalken
03-24-2005, 08:37 AM
Jose Juan Ramos Darias has entered the Master and Servant 2D.

Challenge Page (http://www.cgnetworks.com/challenge/masterandservant/view_entries.php?challenger=6375)

Latest Update: Final Coloring: My big slave
http://www.cgnetworks.com/challenge/entries/8/6375/6375_1112534441_medium.jpg (http://www.cgnetworks.com/challenge/entries/8/6375/6375_1112534441_large.jpg)

Well , I don\'t know if this would be able to be a good idea, the truth is that it began in a simple sketch and I finish coloring it in a couple of hours.
.I hope that like it !

ProfesorFalken
04-03-2005, 01:20 PM
http://www.cgnetworks.com/challenge/entries/8/6375/6375_1112534441_medium.jpg (http://www.cgnetworks.com/challenge/entries/8/6375/6375_1112534441_large.jpg)

Well , I don\'t know if this would be able to be a good idea, the truth is that it began in a simple sketch and I finish coloring it in a couple of hours.
.I hope that like it !

Jack Youngblood
04-03-2005, 04:02 PM
Are you sure you are already into final colouring? No need to rush these things.

I like the idea. The top half in particular looks good.

ProfesorFalken
04-03-2005, 04:16 PM
Hey Jack

What things would you modify of the drawing?

I would thank you for one criticize

Jack Youngblood
04-04-2005, 09:15 PM
Well, I hope you dont mind but I have linked a suggestion of what for me are the major areas of concern.

First I think that the light needs to be sorted out into direct and reflected (i do believe that the 'heart' of this piece will be in the light). The reflected light is a bit blue and very faint (especially visible on his hips). Also I think that a few areas of edge contrast would go down well (eg the back of his head against the outside light). Finally I think that the whole thing should have dark corners (this is a very old master convention. Check out some Remberant if you really want to learn about this kinda thing).

I also think that the figure would benefit from being moved more into the middle, his foot moved down (at the moment I think it 'reads' a bit funny) and the vertical arm bent a bit. I also think that the gesture on that hand is a bit inappropriate.

Also, think about changing the sparkles a bit. Less regular. You have both their size and transparency to play with.

I confess that some of my suggestions have more to do with how I would do things and might not be appropriate to what you want.

Its a very sentimental piece that could go far. Kinda Hans Christian Anderson (the tin soldier). Good luck.

http://www.jackyoungblood.co.uk/images_public/Master_And_Servant_3.jpg

ProfesorFalken
04-05-2005, 06:56 PM
Hey brother, thank you very much for your suggestions, I take note and I begin to get better, by the way, do you know if I can send the same changed image again?

Jack Youngblood
04-05-2005, 08:21 PM
Hey brother, thank you very much for your suggestions

No worries.

do you know if I can send the same changed image again?

Dont exactly know what you mean by that. If in doubt look at the rules or check out the other submissions.

Luck!

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