Somthing is Coming (I need critiques!)

[BlackLight]

Great image so far :applause:

I like the interplay between the vibrant yellow wall and the purple tinged shadows. The kid is nicely rendered as well. The only thing letting the painting down is the sky. It's too flat and there's no sense of distance between it and the foreground. It needs some harshly lit clouds to show some perspective.

[egoego]

Hello Martin,

the point about the sky, to give it more depth is true.
But also I think the wall therefore should have more detail, and surface structure showing at some parts, to make the wall come closer.
All about depth.
But keep with it, cause something is coming

Sarah ;)

http://www.eo-art.com/pictures/birthday_card3.jpg

[-Vormav-]

Great start, Martin. Nice use of shadows, and great details in the feet. As others have pointed out thoug, the sky needs a bit of work. I'd try to play with the balance of the image in that aspect; make it dark enough or bright enough to create a lot of contrast with the rest of the scene.
A lot of the details are really nice so far; just keep them coming. I think you could use some more imperfections in the wall where the yellow meets the plain concrete. Now that I'm focusing on that part though, I'm a little confused... Is it supposed to be colored yellow there as a light source? (guessing so, based on the yellow in the ground, and the way that it follows the shadows). If that's what it is, the yellow is way too strong right now. I kept thinking that that portion of the wall had just been painted. Heh, I'm still a little confused with that part. If it is paint, then adding imperfections along the edge will help make that clearer.

Keep it up. :)

[Ilikesoup]

I think you could use some more imperfections in the wall where the yellow meets the plain concrete. Now that I'm focusing on that part though, I'm a little confused... Is it supposed to be colored yellow there as a light source? (guessing so, based on the yellow in the ground, and the way that it follows the shadows). If that's what it is, the yellow is way too strong right now. I kept thinking that that portion of the wall had just been painted. Heh, I'm still a little confused with that part. If it is paint, then adding imperfections along the edge will help make that clearer.

The area at right where the yellow paint is chipped away looks good, but I hadn't noticed the trace of yellow on the sidewalk. Is that because it's wet and reflecting the yellow? The wall reminds me of the concrete walls where a public beach runs along a busy street and the yellow might be a No Parking zone or something. The purple sky against the yellow wall is a nice contrast, but IMO purple sky means rain and the foreground is too bright for that.

Anyway, my problem with the pic is that there's no sense of urgency. The boy is peeking over the wall, but we can't see the expression on his face and he's not struggling to see. Maybe if the wall were higher and he really had to pull himself up or if he stood on a tipsy pile of crates or something? Anyway, boy, clouds, wall, perspective all look good, but IMO you need to tie all the elements together somehow. Hope that helps.

[AIPh Pretzel]

I think the bricks look a little small. Otherwise, pretty good. Your style vaguely reminds me of peachstapler's work; the shadows and highlights blend softly together.

[Martin_B]

I think the shadow needs most work. I'm not sure. But i think it follow his outline to much and don't follow the depth of the boy. It looks like his back is leaning bakward but that doesn't show in his shadow..

Nice yellow. And nice picture btw.

[martinrebas]

Here's my latest try:

http://www.dtek.chalmers.se/%7Ed3rebas/pics/sic37web.jpg

Now the sky has more depth and color, but I'm afraid that it might just distract from the basic idea, which was to create a composition based on the interplay of fairly solid geometrical shapes. So I sketched a new, more cloudless variant. Unfortunately I'm not happy with that one, either:

http://www.dtek.chalmers.se/%7Ed3rebas/pics/sic37web2.jpg

What do you think?

/Martin

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