another sexy lady

[andreasrocha]

STEP 1

I still don't know where I am going with this one. It started more as "few strokes technique" practice, but I somehow liked the outcome.

http://andreasrocha.no.sapo.pt/CGTalk/03PinUp/Pinup01.jpg

[DrFx]

Oi Andi! Tudo bem? Sim, a gaja tá boa! Mas não é por isso que tou a teclar! Sabes que o Luís foi operado 3ª feira? Ele tá no hospital Egas Moniz no quarto 612, cama B. Tá a recuperar bem, mas ainda vai ter que fazer outra operação mais tarde! Fica bem, dude!

[ms@zx]

hie there,its pretty well done overall,the colors and all.one thing about the left leg,there's a sharp pointy thing just above the heel(if thats angkle).maybe u could fix that up?would it be better if she look up slightly rather than the current possition u have made?thats all for now.i'd really love to see the final outcome on this soon:)

[andreasrocha]

STEP 2

Refined the overall body and added a face...

http://andreasrocha.no.sapo.pt/CGTalk/03PinUp/Pinup02.jpg

[hjalmar]

dammit your getting fast at these

its looking great man:) as expected:P

her far elbow(right) looks a lil weird to me, kinda twisted i think

[andreasrocha]

STEP 3

I changed her stance, following a work colleague's suggestion, giving her a more defying pose. Her left hand also got changed to a more active grabbing gesture. But both hands still need work.

http://andreasrocha.no.sapo.pt/CGTalk/03PinUp/Pinup03.jpg

[Per-Anders]

i like the style, but the balance is off. Also personally I prefered the "Step 1" angle of the head away from the viewer and in a slightly more sensual luxuriant attitude, there was more connection between the torso it's proportions and the lower body.

[andreasrocha]

STEP 4

I hid her right hand because it really wasn't working out. I also corrected her left hand and I hope that it is more or less right now. Photoshop alos played an important part for overall color corrections. Drew Struzan's Indy Jones IV poster was a strong influence here. I also added a frame but I think it still needs some reworking.

http://andreasrocha.no.sapo.pt/CGTalk/03PinUp/Pinup04.jpg

[NauticaC]

Great work! I think you should make her shoes a little bit more visible, make them not look like part of the leg. Nice colors. Looks great :)

[andreasrocha]

STEP 5

After a couple of your suggestions here is an update. Corrected some anatomical dimensions and refined some of the clothing props.

http://andreasrocha.no.sapo.pt/CGTalk/03PinUp/Pinup05.jpg

[Loulu79]

Okay Okay...it's getting there. But me personally there's something odd about her legs entirely. I've done female bodies so damn much that I know what I'm talking about. I get the feeling that you want her slender at the top, but thicker at the bottom. Not bad a concept, if you can pull it off:

1) Fix the knees...they're a bit out of proportion (esp. the left knee). You got it right in Step2 for the left knee.:thumbsup:

2) Work on the knee-shin-calf shape. You're getting there...

3) More detail and shape in her feet so that the shoes itself would make more sense. I wear shoes similar to hers...and believe u me...the bottom parts don't look right.:wise:

The arch of the bottom of the shoes...nope.

Above all: Keep it up!:thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup:

[pearl3d]

amazing work....so beautiful painting

[andreasrocha]

STEP 6

After considering most of the criticism I tried to implement almost all the suggestions from the forums.
Her left arm's position was changed so she would be resting her hand on her hip and not her buttock. The head was slightly enlarged. Her right hand is now grabbing a sword. I added a bit of depth by giving the door/window thickness and adding a floor. Her knees got some adjustments and her breast was also (hopefully corrected). Her shoes were "modeled" a bit more.

Loulu79 - thanks for the crits. They really helped. If you could point out more things I would be very thankful.

pearl3D - thanks...I'm glad you're liking it

http://andreasrocha.no.sapo.pt/CGTalk/03PinUp/Pinup06.jpg

[Lokust]

Beautifull!
My only complaint is that the hand closest to the camera looks very short.

[ms@zx]

hey,ur stuff is coming along pretty well,i kinda like the overall mood,the colors and the women is indeed sexy.just what lokust had mentioned,its not about the hand look shorter or anything,,its the angle and the position that she made.perhaps alil more highlight to the arm would makes it better?just like the one in step 5?
the way u paint and the entire feeling reminds me of the previous work u did on the future gal.
very good work though..:)

[Martin_B]

At overall is it a nice picture.

But i don't like her arms. They look to short 'cause i want to read the arm like an almost straight arm. I think you have to work the deformation of her wrist and shoulder area. Make clear of the directions and that stuff..

[andreasrocha]

STEP 7

Another update. I really had to "cut" her arm off, and put in another one. I had to use photo reference because what I was doing was all wrong, like you all pointe out. Besides, she was in a very uncomfortable position. I hope to have corrected these aspects with this one. I also tilted her head back down. One thing that is bugging me is the head...People keep telling me it's all wrong, but I don't really see it. It seems OK to me, but there must be something wrong for you to be pointing it out.
I defined her clothes a bit more addind more detail here and there.

http://andreasrocha.no.sapo.pt/CGTalk/03PinUp/Pinup07.jpg

ms@zx - thanks man...I'm trying to improve this "Struzanesque" style and keep with it. It's great you connected this piece to my previous pinup.

Martin_B - I hope the arm is OK now. I think she didn't like it either, to be in that akward position. Thanks for the comment.

[TMArtist]

Hi. Nice work so far. It looks like you're hung up on the pose there. My suggestion is to look at her torso. It seems to me that it is arched forward too much, creating an unnatural pose. Consider making her stand more upright with the torso turned clockwise (point of reference: looking down on the figure) so that more of her back is showing to the viewer. This of course will obscure the breast somewhat, so it's an aesthetic tradeoff here. I think her face looks fine by the way. Just straighten up the torso and I think it'll look great. I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work as the colors go on. I hope this helps. Regards.

TMArtist

[Rudeone]

Hey man, another great painting dude.

The head looks fine with me, but maybe it could be a little flat, you could shape the forehead a little more, maybe bring her lips a little forward, it doesn't bug me though.

One thing I'm not sure of is the line of her chest, it doesn't match the line of her throat and I think it should.

[buzuuu]

:thumbsup: wowwwwwwwwww

this is soooooo very nice

[andreasrocha]

STEP 8

Finished at last...I think I am taking too long to do these pics. But for me it is the best way to see what is wrong with the image. I think my main flaw is not taking the sketch seriously. I assume that I can correct everything and try things out in the painting phase, but I suppose I am wrong. Let's see what happens with the next piece. Thanks everybody for the helpful comments.

http://andreasrocha.no.sapo.pt/CGTalk/03PinUp/Pinup08.jpg

[hjalmar]

i like it:)



only thing that bothers me is her lack of character, she doesnt have any presence if you know what i mean...no real commanding look to her

she is designed like shes a highranking soldier or something from the future, but she doesnt look like she has the consious power to command anyone

iunno if you get what i mean...its hard to explain...oh well

aand...hte left side of her chest (kinda facing the camera) is a lil weird, i dunno if its hte cloth or something under it, but it throws me off a lil

[Loulu79]

Yes!Yes! It's coming along...good good...You've listen to MX@ZX about angling...Greaaat

I'm impressed that you nailed what I critiqued you on. You've nailed the shape of the left shoe/boot. Excellent! :wip:

Now here's my other crit to make your work blow everyone sox's off as the final piece:

1)The right foot needs shaping. (bottom part of boot)

2)The right knee/calf/shin is not properly in proportion (the knee is too low)

3)As I said in your extra WIP thread, look at a real female model (or just simply ask someone -esp. a female to stand in that same position). Ask them to stand in that very position like your character. Look at the real likeness ... then look at your work...to and fro...And you'll get it!;) This will make your life a lot faster and easier!;)

Other than that ... Excellent work so far!:wip:

[vijil]

Hi,

I feel I have to point out that of all the pics, step two seems to have the best anatomy and pose. Were I you I'd probably go back and use that one. I'm with others here in finding the legs on your final somewhat short below the knee, and the arms and head position just don't seem right.

Step two looks really good though...

[SebastianPatric]

Nice shading, but I don't find this lady all that sexy. She looks more like something out of an old school comic book. Try making her more curvy and work on the hair. And her pose looks kinda stiff. When you posted the second pic you said you didn't know where you were going with it and that may be your main problem. She lacks dirrection and you try to stick different things onto her without spoiling what you have, thereby not making progress. Next time start with a strong idea and execute it.

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