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10-14-2004, 02:01 PM
This was my entry for the Deathfall.com animation competition. I would like to get some feedback on it. What works and what doesn't? How can I improve this? This was done in Maya.(It is about 2.2MB)
10-14-2004, 09:11 PM
*the poses could be much stronger. ie. much more of a tense feeling or of anxiety.. a building up of stress or emotion.
*you could touch it up with stronger expressions with the gestures of the hands.
*the timing to could be worked on more.. the over all feeling is floaty.
*there should be more eye contact between the speaker and the audience.
*the timing could be tweaked out more when he pauses between talking or when he is taking in a breath.
*i cant read his lips too much at all.
*the end part could be strengthed much more, it is the climax of the conversation and all.
note, im just a student in animation so take what you can or want out of it.
10-15-2004, 01:42 PM
Thanks alot for your comments. I am going to make another pass, I will try to focus on the things you mentioned. Great comments. Any more?
10-15-2004, 09:21 PM
I agree, you are off to a really great start! The very end, you might want to consider a more sinister gesture, like a turning of the head to the camera intead of the open hands gesture. Might help establish the unsettling moment better.
10-16-2004, 03:41 AM
Ok the hands are huge so that means that they are a what gives the character personality, so you want to be more expressive with the hands, make them do more, wave a round, hand gestures when talking. Something! Not to much though or it will take away the viewer from seeing the animation because he will be focused on the hands.
10-18-2004, 03:16 PM
Right on! Thanks for the ideas. I will be fixing things up and posting again. Great comments! You have given me some great ideas.
10-18-2004, 09:14 PM
its very nice, but i was wondering what the sound is from?
the music in the background sounds like se7en
10-20-2004, 04:39 PM
I really like the begining. It seems to feel much better than the end. I agreee the hands are very important. The end needs to feel more suspensful. Try some different gestures with the hands at the end. Remember it's supposed to climactic and scary.
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