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gabrielsimon
10-13-2004, 02:59 PM
this is a religious assassin, named Aim, that i made for a story of mine, called Tainted. to make her, i used aura and a mouse, so far its taken three hours.

i was wondering what you thought of the attampted comic book style, and what do you think i should do for the rest of the background? positive and nagative comments are all appreciated, caseu its nice to know where i need to improove...

in the story, shes hunting a renegade super assassin, at first.

thanks

gabriel simon

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http://www.gabrielsimon.com/images/stories/final%20aim%20with%20background.jpg
NoPancakeMix
10-13-2004, 08:27 PM
painting with a mouse is tough. im just going to rattle off a bunch of things to improve here.

the entire scene needs some shadows to anchor the character and the ladder. right now they both kind of float. i cant tell if shes leaning against the wall or just leaning back or what.

her right boot seems to have a different light source than the rest of the scene

the bricks on the wall and the ladder are disproportionate to the character. try making the bricks larger and the ladder wider. speaking of the ladder, it seems to be butted flush up against the wall. how would you put your hands over the rungs? the rungs themselves look too thick and are of varying sizes.

the whole scene could benefit from some different color values. most of what you have here is flat, saturated color, which is why the boots and the gun stick out so much. the bricks for example are all the same color of red.

that should be enough to keep you busy for a while
gabrielsimon
10-13-2004, 08:44 PM
thank you!
gabrielsimon
10-14-2004, 09:35 PM
well, i took all of that advice into account, and i reworked most of the image. took me all night.

but here it is, please, coninue to tell me what you think.

i would appreciate it.

http://www.gabrielsimon.com/images/stories/final%20aim%20with%20background1.jpg

o yeah, and i used a 3d program for the background, casue i coulnt quite get it right by mouse alone.
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