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msouthan
09-28-2004, 07:28 PM
Ok guys, this is my first pass - http://www.alphabravado.com/ash/first_attempt.mov (http://www.alphabravado.com/ash/first_attempt.mov)

I'm gonna put a book in his hand that he's reading from at the beginning, and then loses during the cough.

Haven't gotten to the tail end of the audio yet..

-ms

Suricate
09-29-2004, 07:14 AM
Hi Miles,

not a bad first pass! I especially like the part when he coughs heavily.

Some crits:

1. The silhouette doesn't read very well, so maybe you should place the camera not in front but more to the side.

2. It seems to me that he walks too quickly when saying 'Clattoo...', maybe a more stately walk would be better.

3. The final pose after the coughing doesn't really fit IMHO, maybe you should try something else.

Keep the updates coming !

msouthan
09-29-2004, 01:33 PM
Hi Miles,


not a bad first pass! I especially like the part when he coughs heavily.

Some crits:

1. The silhouette doesn't read very well, so maybe you should place the camera not in front but more to the side.

2. It seems to me that he walks too quickly when saying 'Clattoo...', maybe a more stately walk would be better.

3. The final pose after the coughing doesn't really fit IMHO, maybe you should try something else.

Keep the updates coming !
Suricate,

Thanks for the crits. I've been working on the silhouette.. He's more profile now when he's coughing. I've slowed down the walk a bit too.

-ms

msouthan
09-29-2004, 10:37 PM
I have a new version up (and the old one is now down). Take a look, here - http://www.alphabravado.com/ash/second_attempt.mov (http://www.alphabravado.com/ash/second_attempt.mov)

miles

msouthan
10-06-2004, 07:37 PM
Ok, new versions is up here: http://www.alphabravado.com/ash/roundthree.mov (http://www.alphabravado.com/ash/roundthree.mov)

Comments and crits encouraged..!

s3ksee
10-07-2004, 02:19 AM
Ok, new versions is up here: http://www.alphabravado.com/ash/roundthree.mov (http://www.alphabravado.com/ash/roundthree.mov)

Comments and crits encouraged..!HI Miles.
Nice work. I guess it's still in progress, so we really can't nit-pick too much about it.
Just a friendly reminder... Don't skip out on your lip-sync; I know it's still in its rough form, but alot of animators skip refining the lip-sync of their characters. Don't hide it by making too many body movements.

I'm thinking maybe at the end when he says "ok then..." he could act like he's trying to leave a crime scene without looking suspicious...almost like walking backwards...trying to get away, but not looking like he's trying to get away... know what I mean?

That being said, I will now attend to my own animation.:bounce:

msouthan
10-08-2004, 04:56 PM
HI Miles.
Nice work. I guess it's still in progress, so we really can't nit-pick too much about it.
Just a friendly reminder... Don't skip out on your lip-sync; I know it's still in its rough form, but alot of animators skip refining the lip-sync of their characters. Don't hide it by making too many body movements.

I'm thinking maybe at the end when he says "ok then..." he could act like he's trying to leave a crime scene without looking suspicious...almost like walking backwards...trying to get away, but not looking like he's trying to get away... know what I mean?

That being said, I will now attend to my own animation.:bounce:
Thanks for the feedback s3ksee! I've beefed up the lip sync a bit now and I'm working on a better solution for the "ok then.." Can't wait to see your animation!

-miles

s3ksee
10-09-2004, 03:32 AM
Thanks for the feedback s3ksee! I've beefed up the lip sync a bit now and I'm working on a better solution for the "ok then.." Can't wait to see your animation!

-miles
You bet dude. I'm doing the "boomstick" one. :applause:

mimo8
10-09-2004, 04:15 PM
allready good .. but what I cannot understand the gesture when he reads out verada .
I have seen this "shakespeareque" gesture of lifting one arm up to the sky in several animation, mostly it is more like a filler that wants to tell us that the character is acting. It doesnt support the storytelling.

perhaps its a personal thing I have with or better aggains this gesture, but probably you dont need him showing that he is an actor, but instead ad another pose that fits into the surrounding "military ... reading the names ..."

keep it up - I like the cartoony, rubbery style a lot

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