Animation Short: Erráns Ruber

[gavinb]

man thats really good, i love it :) and your 2004 showreel is kewl too....

[mjdowswell]

thanks dude :)

[Essania]

Looks good so far!

It need some sound at the beginning; "space sounds".

I'm not sure I understand the whole thing, but what are those "radio voices" if we see only robots?

I LOVE Mozart's Requiem!!! :thumbsup:

[flingster]

very very nice...enjoyed it alot...well done bud.

(crits is you want em...dunno.
planet shot early on...albedo part looks a little to glow like...BUT livable...and i'd like some shockwave to the planet blowing up...even execessive camera shake to knock it of view entirely.
top shot of truck..has some flickering on it
the early fly through part...from space to warehouse type place...would like editing broken up slightly for more drama...eg...nice smooth flowing in shots you've got...but every now and again...a quick burst flash of action/drama...then smooth flowing again...giving viewer pause for thought...just an idea though.
i really love the look of it all though...fantastic stuff...and that facility with the pump/piston like things rising up and down..v stylised...)

anyways...good work bud.:thumbsup:

[flyingP]

some nice camera work in there :thumbsup: ......not to sure about the initial shot approaching the planet though, just looks a little bit too static to me to start with and then the cut is very abrupt, you had another view of the planet a bit further just before it cuts to a shot with the truck on which I feel worked better, although there I aslo find the cut a bit abrupt
Overall really nice work though, most impressed :applause:

[anobrin]

Great atmospherics but the piece
would be more dynamic if it had some actual
character animation.
right now it just seems like camera pans and dives
over mostly static models

great start though :thumbsup:

[mjdowswell]

Essania

Thanks there, yep the radio conversation is meant to be a sort of a radio from a long time ago of humans.

flingster

Thanks dude, glad you like it. : o) yeah a shockwave would be good, that truck flickering prob i don’t know what it is...I’ll have to change the texture or scale it up or down I think. I know what you mean about the long take, it gets a bit like a very slow moving still once the cameras over the hill. or you talking about the very start?...a bit like A L I E N 3......hehe...o by the way A L I E N S is on tonight, hope its the one with the 20mins of extra.....that sounds terrible i should have that on bought DVD...

flyingP

Thanks man : o) yep i agree with you on abrupt cuts I must admit dude, i’ll drink to that. Im not happy witht eh cut from the close up of the robot inside the control room to the top down view of the truck.

anobrin

Thanks there, I agree 100% with you there on that, its more of a animatic at the moment than animation. I really need to get into proper rigging of the robots.

[flingster]

i meant the beginning bud..
i mean the period of time from the camera starting off from space...and gradually it is moving down and down on the planet surface and then ends up inside some building or other...that whole period is quite long and the music is gradually building with the slow camera movement downwards...i just thought kinda flashback like...eg a couple of long slow camera movement shots...then a very rapid flash of action....then back to slow moving downwards camera movements again...kinda hard to describe what i'm on about i guess...but ideally it would build the dramatic feel to it...making it more flash horror style though which you might not want.
either way i enjoyed it as it is...would like a bit more movement to the robots...this could work with what i was talking about earlier...making the robots movement more aggressive...but it would change it quite a bit..as at the moment the viewer is left in doubt as to whether the robots are good or bad...which is quite nice really.
:shrug:

[mjdowswell]

ello flingster

yep, one of my main goals with my animations, is for me to bring back the long take...somthing which is both...some people love some people dont like at all...BUT... I'm all for fast short takes if and when they heighten a scene ie a car chase....BUT...i'd have to see it first, in order to say weither I liked it or not...I dont wnat to shoot somthing down I havn't tryed or seen yet...that wouldn't be right at all...I'm 100% sure the beginning of Alien 3 has a very simalar thing to what your taking about...which is on channel 5 at some point....will know at 00:45 tomorrow when they say.

thanks for the crit though dude. it gets down to time manegement over here, and i have to do this comic book / graphic novel thing next. i wish the days were longer...and i didn't have to sleep!

[eddieB]

a bit like A L I E N 3......hehe...o by the way A L I E N S is on tonight
I immediately thought of a cross between Aliens and Contact ... love the work - especially the lack of "space sound" as someone wrote...
I have to say - it's shorts like these that really get me motivated to continue learning and create things.
:bounce:

[Leebre]

I don't have much to add that hasn't already been said. You did a very good job of establishing mood and setting. Lighting and color theme are also top-notch. Although I liked the gradual approach to the planet's surface the camera sweep became a bit too repetitious after a while. Great job!

[mjdowswell]

eddieB

thanks dude :)

Leebert

thanks man, i'll drink to that one...hehe :)

[Damsel]

I really loved it! The music fit perfectly for me and you conveyed the vastness of space as well as including tragedy. A wonderful piece...I only wish I could do that. :-)

[policarpo]

Seen any Tarkovsky films? Watch Solaris and Stalker for starters.

Nice little piece L.D. Keep up the good work! You have a nice aesthetic...

[mjdowswell]

Damsel

yay!, a dudess watched the thing......hehe : o)....thankyou for the kind coments, I'm glad you like it.. : o)

policarpo

thanks man, yeah i'd love to see his films, ive heard a lot about the 40 minute long take in Solaris or is it a 20min long take?...theres a really nice french film called Raffifi where theres 20mins of no talking, its really good. thanks again dude.

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