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capone_adam
05-23-2004, 10:57 PM
I have been doing illustrations for quite a while now, I think I have what it takes but there are some key things I think I am missing that is stopiing me from progressing.

Here is a example of how I work, from thumbs to the finished article. To me I think the problems are the use of colour, depth problems and inking problems. I really feel like I need other people to crit me though so it becomes more apparant. Don't hold back!

http://www.caponeart.com/deletewip2.jpg

http://www.caponeart.com/deletewip3.jpg

http://www.caponeart.com/deletewip1.jpg
Deathropolis
05-24-2004, 08:33 AM
It looks pretty good, lots of details, but i think you could work out the tetures a bit more, i mean there are many dull spots which are basicly filled witha single color. Also i would use 2 ëscape point" instead of one in the center. Maybe your drawings get some more "soul" if you put some things in your drawing like:
-a large figure in the front, covering a large part of the pic
-maybe if the distance is more blurry you'll gte more depthperception.
-Maybe if you give the shades a color it would look better.
The pic looks a bit basic, but still, a pretty cool pic.
Ilikesoup
05-24-2004, 09:38 PM
Actually, I like the colors, but here are things I think would strengthen this piece:
1. Sense of proportion. A proportional adult male walking down the stairs at right would probably have to crawl on his belly to fit through the arch at the foot of the steps. Imagine a person at different points in the picture and see if it still looks right.

2. Sense of place. Left side foreground (upstairs) appears to be an indoor shopping mall, while the right side appears to be outside in a run-down neighborhood. Are the squiggles on the wall cracks or graphiti? If graphiti, color it in so it's more obvious. What are those jumbled wires in the background running side to side and why are they there?

Just make sure that everything here has a function and that it functions as it should. That, and make sure to practice by sketchig from real life. Things make sense when you sketch from real life!
capone_adam
05-25-2004, 02:22 PM
Here is latest,

http://www.caponeart.com/deletewip4.jpg
cha0t1c1
05-25-2004, 04:00 PM
quite the improvement, but...You still have lots of empty space...since the illustration is of a modern environment, graffiti would enhance the sense of overusage...espacially on the walls on the left...also gradual darkenning would help, the blurring is well made...
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