View Full Version : Animation: Thesis Animated Short
VictorJGarza 04-10-2004, 10:53 PM Check out my animated short. Completed it abut 2 weeks ago. Post your opinions.
Download it from:
http://www.victorjavgarza.com/workdemo.htm
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Kwago
04-13-2004, 07:57 AM
what's up my old friend :D
dude, that animation was freakin fantastic - loved everything about it... that little kiss made me crack up
definitely front page worthy
my only crit is your website, if my browser window is too big the nav bar moves and the text wraps , aside from that i like the layout and the color choice, plus your new logo is very sleek. But yeah, try putting everything in it's own table and us a spacer image on both sides to make sure everything stays in place. you can check out my site if ya need an example. http://kwago.com
btw how's rob and i need to give you guys my new # or you can get it from juan
mattlajoie
04-13-2004, 02:45 PM
HAHA!, one of the few shorts that actually made me laugh out loud (very rare in our quiet, quiet office)
great job, carpet folding at end, great :thumbsup:
Hey great stuff man, alot of work has gone into that. I know it's easy to say but the character animation could have been better.
Cool concept and execution
HumanZoetrope
04-13-2004, 04:52 PM
Hey Victor,
Congrats on finishing your thesis. Was that your voice? Pretty funny stuff ("Jim! Dumbass!" - he he he).
I noticed a lot of snappy and odd movements throughout the short. There are also some strange spine contortions going on.
One important thing I noticed: Where is the shoulder movement from the clavicles? Your character has some great pronounced shoulders, but they don't pivot from the sternum. Just moving the humerus isn't good enough--you're missing out on a lot of weight because of it, especially when he lifts the barbell.
Finally, the payoff is great--falling on the running treadmill is a hilarious gag. But it's all wrong. I've witnessed this first-hand when a buddy of mine was screwing around on his girlfriend's treadmill (I couldn't stop laughing for a couple weeks--damn funny. I'm laughing right now thinking about it). Your upper body accelerates faster than your lower body and you literally flip around when that happens. I know the short is anything but 'realistic', but it looks to me like Gym Jim is still obeying our known laws of physics and gravity, and I think that will help sell the animation better. Plus, it would be hilarious if he flipped around and then shot off. His initial reaction to the turbo setting looks spot on, though. Great job with that.
Phew...don't take this the wrong way. I still think it's good, but when it comes to animation I have a lot to say :) Keep it up, you could turn this short into a great piece of animation with some more polish. - Jeremy
SGT.Squeaks
04-13-2004, 07:03 PM
That was great!! It had our whole office laughing. I loved it. It really is front page material.
Garma
04-13-2004, 09:17 PM
ehehe wow man that was hilarious! The voice of the dude rocked my world. I saw some glitches but nothing worse.
lol (literally)
:thumbsup:
shbazjinkens
04-13-2004, 10:35 PM
Awesome, hehe.
The scene is of a much higher quality than the character, but it doesn't really detract the animation IMO.
I was laughing pretty hard, woke my roomate up from his nap.
edaddy
04-15-2004, 02:25 AM
good animation victor, the opening scene where it flashes the pictures of girls and then abs is a nice touch. I have no problem w/ the animation but i think some of the sound effects were a little weak
jmdajr
04-16-2004, 08:55 PM
I love you primo!
great stuff!
No sweat about the audio,
You are not a damn sound engineer.
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