Finished Short 3D animation: The Factory

[SpaXe]

hey cool^^~!!!
really enjoyed it.

well i am not going to post in your site cause there's alot but here's nothing@@...

[lucaspan]

Yeah, really great work. Great atmosphere, great ligthing, but most of all: GREAT CONTENT, that's something some 3D animations are lacking nowadays. Keep up the good work !!

Luc

[pedrock]

Thanx for your replies, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Stay tuned for my next project!

[SergeL]

Yes, I liked the ending too. The modelling works, and the ambiance too, even if I would have liked more colour in it. Did you also do all the sound effects? who is the band playing on the main theme?

[Volker]

Hhmmm......

I had a couple problems with this Pedrock.

There is definatly a pacing issue here. If this is a little project to have fun with, then ROCK ON!

But...if this is to be professional on any level, some things need to change. Actually, I had to force myself to keep watching it after the first 30 sec. I don't even remember if the opening credits were done by then. Things were just moving waaaaay tooo sllooowwww. I never had a desire to finish watching the short. Nothing made me think..."Oooo, I wonder what's going to happen next". There was just a bunch of machinery, and some robots skating around. I was just waiting for the story to happen, but it never did. As far as continuity, if you want to corilate the green goop as brown cookies, you need to show some sort of transition that it goes through. It was kind of tough to see the green stuff, and then make the connection that these were the cookies. Sorry I can't be more detailed, but I watched it last night, and I'm writing this at work the next day. Keep it up, and maybe next time do a storyreel, and show it to everyone here for some crits. Hope I'm not being too harsh, just want you to see the reality of things. Good luck on your next one!! I'll be watching for it.

~Zach

[pedrock]

Hi Babyhopper, thanks very much for your critics.

I had a lot of different reactions about that pace issue you are talking about. The fact is that it is related to a personal artistic choice: I wanted to create a different kind of 3D animated short, that even if it displayed robots and sci-fi, I wanted it to be, at least for the first part, very slow and contemplative (close to classic japanese cinematography, and way far from the flashing action-explosion-fighting-robots style), just there to help bulding the atmosphere. The fact is that a lot of people liked that kind of 'tense begining', while quite another lot (like you) feel it's too slow. I suppose that, even having made that choise, the effect can be improved in order to make it more 'watchable' I agree with you, and I'm now actually preparing another totally different project with a more classic pace. As for the surprise issue, it's all concentrated in the ending twist (or at least that's what I tried to do), like if the rest of the short was actually preparing the ending (3d animation viewers have become very impatient, like it has to be breathtaking every single frame, and here I was trying to explain that just a couple of seconds at the end can make it up for a long introduction, but maybe I missed this point...).
Thanks very much anyway, I'll keep all these comments in mind for my next project, in my quest for knowing what are the good proportions in the equation (personal commitment)/(watchability)

Cheers!!

[WillyDoom]

I liked it too. I agree with babyhopper, there are a couple of slow moments, but they are kinda worth the waiting, they build up something. Even if they are slow I was never bored. The robots lack some real life by the way, even if the modelling is cool...
Seeya! :)

[pedrock]

Sorry SergeL, I forgot about your question. Yes I did all the mixing and sound editing by myself, and the main theme is Chemical Brothers' "Leave home".
Cheers

[gogolmonk]

Hi Pedrock, it must have taken you an awfull time to do all that by yourself. Just for that I admire you. I understand what you mean about popular watchability/artistic commitment, it's always hard to put the borderline in the right place. Anyway, it's a very promising first work, keep learning...the sky is the limit!!

[3doody]

Cool !

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