Character/Scene : The Cathedral

[Pufferfish]

Im not totally sure what is going on in this image, but the atmospehere in this image is pretty annoying (in a good way). The expression on the guys face (in front) is good, he is obviously irritated about something. Gives a lot of mood.


About the composition:
The older man could use a different placement. Moving him a bit more left and maybe a bit further back...or maybe adding a distant person way back in left side could improve the balance.

About the drawing:
It looks good, not much to crit on this cause I think it has a pretty good overall style.
Only thing I would do/test is either make the guy in front more detailed or make the older man less detailed just to give it a little more depth. On the other hand changing the location of the older man would do the trick too.

Nevertheless its a good start.

[JamesMK]

The painting so far looks very good, particularly the depth of field feeling of the environment. Very good indeed. Excellent technique. Needs a lot more detail of course, but I assume this is a rather early stage of the work.

I would agree about the placement of these two characters - in my eyes it looks a bit "crowded": you've got all this empty space, but they seem to almost be standing on eachothers feet somehow. I would like them a bit more apart, and moved as a group perhaps a teensy bit more to the right (yes, right).

I don't like the look on the annoyed guys face - but I assume that may be the point here. So, there's nothing wrong with how you've painted him, but he has that "not-a-likeable-person" look to me...

[Doubt]

Nice start, your color choice on the main character's ear seems a little harsh at this stage and doesn't seem to fit in with the overall color scheme which you've setup.

The piece has a very nice painterly quality to it, when it's all done, it seems like it would be a good candidate to be printed largescale on canvas and framed. Seems to have the makings of that kind of piece to me.

I'm not sold on the compositional layout yet but I'm guessing some of these issues will work themselves out as you invest more time into it.

[KingMob]

damnit just wrote a crit and the server busy message ate it.

Ok so here goes .again. First off I really like this so far, nice and sketchy cool lighting etc...blah blah blah, now for the mean stuff ;)

The main character seems to distort on his right side, in contrast to the brighter left side, something feels off about it. He also may be a bit to dark, tho I know the mood is that, be nice to grab aa bit more attention to him.

Composition wise, it may be better to have him further to the right, close up, and the older man a bit further back.. maybe lighting some candles or something, tho this is a big change so forget i said it.... but I do think the composition is a tad boring now...

But all that aside a fantastic start, and sure to be a nice picture for the portfolio

[Per-Anders]

well, thanks for the feedback all, and uh, i've actually gone completely the opposite to what you all said hehe and put the old guy further to the left. originally he wasn't in there at all, and i played around with removing him again, but it didn't seem to fit, when i came in originally because of the way he modified the composition i originally added some extra space to the left hand side. anyhow, see what you think about something like this. i also spent a little while adding a little more detail (though it wont get much more detailed).

edit: modified and reuploaded, so you'll need to press refresh to see it correctly.

http://www.peranders.com/c4d8/samples/jpg/cathedraljpg2.JPG

[AlbertArt]

Nice.
I like the BG and the old guy but when it gets to the young guy and his eye and face and pose, i'm not diggin it. I think the old guy is enough in the pic.
I see your favorite part of the image was the guys eyeball, which obviously draws our focus there.

[mandark1011]

Hey

I REALLY like the contradictions in this image (the last one) the the cathedral type look on one side and what looks like a blacksmiths on the other coupled with the old revered figure and the young disgruntalled man. I REALLY like the style, its easy to see your passionate about your work.

However I agree that the young man, tho emoting well, is still the weakest element in this design. I think if you get in touch with that emotion totally then use the more raw style present in the old man youll have a top rate piece here!

[Per-Anders]

yes i agree, he is the weakest element there, definitely something i will try to change next time i am working on this peice.

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