Characters: Yamazaki and Cammy

[J.K.Makowka]

His face could be improved and her right knee also, otherwise not bad, but maybe you overused the lensflare effect a bit ;)

[JavonX]

I agree with Makowka.
And the lense flare has to go

[feeesh]

hey there,

Cool piece and cool characters. I really like the upshot and the tilted angle. Couple critiques:

-agreed, the lens flare definitely needs to go. Lens flares are over-used in general with digital art nowadays and not used correctly. I can see you intended a bright light behind him there which could work ok, but bring bright enough to cause a big lens-flare like that throws off the entire composition of the page because it distracts from the figures and draws your eyes to a wierd area, his armpit, heh.

-the other main thing I noticed were her legs. The musculature is really wierd. I can sorta see what you are trying for and I know the character and she does have realy thick defined muscular legs. But you should definitely open up a pic of a female bodybuilder next to you while you try and work out the foreshortening on those. You've got a couple wierd things going on with the lines but also a couple spots, like on her right leg, with the shading from the color which makes it look a little wierd too.

Anyway, hope thats not too brutal. The rest of her figure looks really good, really nice foreshortening. And a nice butt, :-P

-Jason

[Stillwell]

Great piece, nice choice of colors, but get rid of the lens flare.

[GMFuu]

Yeah, I know people abuse the lens flare a lot but I thought I could warrant it's use for the whole dramatic of this piece, especially when you think of how big he is compared to her, but:

Feeesh: Yeah, I never considered that the focus of the piece would be his armpit. Live and learn I suppose. That's why you're the professionals and I'm the law-talking guy...

[Stillwell]

If you really want to use it, you can, but tune it down a bit.

Since the background is blurred, feeesh is right: it draws the attention to the armpit.

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