GIRL in swimsuit

[Facial Deluxe]

Really good ! Except from the hair in the back, but easyly fixable after such a great work. I really like the generous shapes of the babe...

[graphiouz]

Very nicely lit ! !:thumbsup:
the model looks fine to me, appart from a sharp seam on her knee and the back of the knee needs to be soften alittle, the elbow are to pointy/sharp, and the hands are to small,.and the arm alittle thin.
The outside of the foot near the heel looks strange, maybe pull the area after the heel inwards,.
get rid of or soften the specular at the back of her legs,.

well, very small tweaks here and there, and you got an awesome women!
other then that fine job, :p

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[Da Saint]

I think the head looks a little to small. And also tha hair in the back like Facial Deluxe said.

Other than that, really nice model. Did you make the entire model or is it poser?

[dmonk]

good work, but I think the bikini string in the back is really thick.

P.S. is it cold in here?

[AJ]

Very nice indeed!

As everyone else said, the hair's a little odd at the moment and the backs of the knees definitely needs softening.

You a fan of Stahlberg? :p ;)

[Spirit2029]

extremely good, love how well you got the cloth looking. Hair could use some work as its the only thing standing out to me. Also must be chilly....

Spirit2029

[Joril]

GIRL in swimsuit
Oh, you're going for 10k+ views.

Gorgeous looking girl.
Some crits though, I also thought the head looks a little to small. And the strands of her top piece (umm, you know) look a little thick.

Very well done, those 10k+ views will be well deserved.:D

[LoneLobo]

yeah, looks very good.

But the body reminds me of j-lo, did you use her as a ref?

I think is anatomy is quite the same as your model ;)

[Rogue]

That's nice . I love the proportions...kinda 'average build'. Fixing the things that's been mentioned above will lead to an awesome model, not that what you've got isn't already a great piece of work. Beautiful render, btw.

[Paata]

Cool work!!!

[Scuba]

very nice i would say the following things could use some work


her sholder blades in the back picture
her hair in the back
and there is something funny with her ribcage area or with how her arms are attached to her shoulders.

[l_farley13_l]

The model is great! And the face very Stahlburg-esque. The bottom seems a bit low slough for it to hold on very long, but no real problem w/ that ;) The big thing seems to be deformations, you'll really have to massage them in esp in the wrist (looks too smooth, no bones, no skin folding on the inside) and the elbow (look just a bit too sharp, and the muscles seem a bit lacking at bottom)

Other than that really awesome work! What are the plans for the model, a paint job and some real muscles perhaps?

see you,

Farley13

[tobalno3]

looks good but i think the hair in the back needs to taper more at the end.

[dark_lotus]

i must say that even though the head looks a tiny bit small, the proportions on it are fantastic.

i think that the hair at the back will look really good, once textured.

Great jobbo!:applause: :applause: :bounce: :thumbsup:

Oh and i forgot to mention, that i think the nipples are a bit to pronounced, just soften them a bit i think.

[Joel Hooks]

Originally posted by dark_lotus

Oh and i forgot to mention, that i think the nipples are a bit to pronounced, just soften them a bit i think.

That's the only thing I noticed too, that hasn't been mentioned previously. I think the proportions are great!

The nips look like they are made of steel though :)

[hypercube]

She looks great. I like that she's got very human proportions, nice balance. :thumbsup:

I'll echo the crits on the softening, knees and back, insole, etc.

The hair I figure just isn't mapped yet, or looks like that's the plan..if you're going to leave it an untextured figure study, would change that..otherwise great.

Same for the comments on the bikini top, it seems to have a lot of problems..the bottoms look amazing, great wrinkling and 'cling'. The top seems to suffer from looking like it was just that part of the body grabbed and shifted out..if it's that thin of a swimsuit that the nipples show that much, it should be a lot tighter..feels very 'thick', and the ties especially.

Really like her otherwise, very nice pose and feel. I think with a few little tweaks she'd be perfect. Hope to see her textured too. :)

[Treb]

thats all i can say :thumbsup:

[seethemd]

thanks for all the replies, ive updated the back image with some minor changes...

great comments everyone is making, im working on fixing the points raised...

[walee]

very nice modelling ... is it possible to see the wireframe version of your model ?

[wyktor]

:wavey: Yeah, Great modeling.

You should try to do something with nipples. They are too obvious. And also try to play a little with her bikini. I mean, make them one size down so they look like they are "pushed" into her body, not just lying over.

[Stever]

back of the bikini kinda looks like of loin cloth. Nice work otherwise

[Stever]

Is she pregnant?

[toma]

Hi,

Wel that's impressive. Won't crit it anyway :)

Could you make a close-up of her face ? She looks to be so graceful ! And those sensuous lines my gosh :eek: :eek: :eek:


Did you model it with references ? Drawings, phots or living model ? :cool:

Well that's impressive. Congratulations !

[Edward Peretti]

What a supurb model! I get a real turn on from those realistic proportions. The face is just gorgeous. Hair does need work, mabey a job for shave and haircut when it finaly goes beta.

nice job.

Edd

[spm]

so, i guess steven is not going safe anymore ;)

[epasinet]

Please post a wireframe cloth model!!!
And the wirefrema girl model withoht bikini.
I'm very interestred of your model because there are parts very perfect. Compliments...!
Your work is very very perfect!

Enrico

[igor popovic]

:eek: hard-ons :eek:
yeaaaaaaa

[psil]

Lovely!!:applause:

The head looks a tad small, maybes -easily fixed

Any chance of c/u's - esp face??

[seethemd]

thanks for all the comments on this,

here's the wireframe :

http://home.kooee.com.au/theresaf/womanwire.jpg

[misterboogie]

Beautiful work Seethemd!
My only comment would be her hair. Spend a little more time on that and you're in the house. Outstanding!

[dukedirk]

It's a shame that everyone's finding so many faults with such an excellent work -- nature of the business, I guess. If you were Michealangelo I might expect you to get everything right on the first try ... You should still be proud of it.

The ribcage is too 'cloven'. The bottommost ribs should draw up to the solar plexus, which is located just south of her bikini top. The mesh reflects this, but is pulled apart too much, from what I can see in the pictures.

Great job.

[dark_lotus]

Originally posted by dukedirk
It's a shame that everyone's finding so many faults with such an excellent work.

The idea of finding faults is to further improve on excellence.

[Colony15]

Good, i like a lot.... same problems as mentioned above, hands, arm, etc.. but all MINOR tweaks, not bad for a weeks work though :applause:

[FALCON]

Hi. Nice model! The only thing would look better is to taper her stomach in from the obliques"love handles". As it stands now, (from thefront view) her stomach looks like it reaches all the way to the edge of her hips (doesn't look anatomically correct) Giving some space between the love handles and where the side of the stomach starts to slightly billow out, will give it a more realistic appearence.
The rest of her looks great! Love the way you made the feet, knees and achilie's (hope I spelled that right) heel.

Take care,
Ramon

[elalumie]

No offense dude, but "your" stuff is so close to Steven's Stalhberg's work that it makes me doubt it's yours...:hmm:

You got a wireframe of that to show?

E.

[rainman]

he already did....

[Subcriminal]

seethemd,

I would like to applaud your modeling ability, and for choosing a more realistic, and therefore, more beautiful female form to model. I get so darn sick of all those other lanky, skinny, far-fetched, big-boobed, skinny-hipped 3D models that seem to flood this place. So thanks again for showing your work, it's a breath of fresh air!
:bounce:

[Renderedbrian]

Originally posted by dark_lotus


Oh and i forgot to mention, that i think the nipples are a bit to pronounced, just soften them a bit i think.


She is smuggling peanuts in her bikini top..... :applause:


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brian

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