DeepForest - painting

[Lombardo]

i think you have a really good sense of lighting. keep going with the style youve established and continue to be bold with your line quality.

I think that you could vary the shapes a bit more, cylinders, straights seem to be the dominate shape in your composition, there are two almost paralell lines running almost horizontal through the composition, at this stage im not quite sure if they're a man made structure or fallen trees, or branches, but i think that they create some convergences with the other trees that eliminates the negative space of the sky. I get the feeling that you want to qive the audience a sense that they are trapped in this forest, you are successful if that was your attempt, but i feel that you could pull it back a bit and show us more of the sky.

Not sure if the image in the bottom left is part of the same composition because of its overlapping the tree in the foreground, or it is an overlay of a following scene, it appears to be a man made highway, like a futuristic tunnel like structure with a car driving away from us. if this is part of the composition i dont think it fits in the environment yet, maybe it needs more overlap from the surrounding trees, i think another thing is that the perspective on the trees is different than that of the highway.

hope this helps, you are close to having a great layout.

[DaPrato]

Really thanks for your critic Lombardo...
I anderstand your vision on the sky, and the thinking with the trees... For this paint, i dont prepare anything, just art :D
I draw many lines anyway, and starting trees and futur building...
So, like you see, my painting is a wip, i would like practice my style, or testing light and shadow.. like you see, i would like have a look like my highway in the botom...
But i apply your recommendation in my next painting.

thx, seya

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