View Full Version : wanted: professional critique on my animation reel
Phredrek 01-03-2012, 10:38 AM Hi everyone!
I'd like to rework my reel a bit, I'd like some honest professional critiques on it.
http://vimeo.com/10406161
I know that the dialogue bit is the weakest, any pointers? or just start over again?
Thanks!
|
|
Brettzies
01-04-2012, 11:13 PM
Over all not bad, I think the presentation and music is good. I like the beginning guy before your name and the little dancing guy at the end too. Without getting overly detailed, here are some things that stood out to me.
Good things:
.the dancing animals are nice in general
.i like the green guy picking up the building
.the egg with feet is funny
.the flying dragons are good
Could use some work:
.skateboarder looks like he could have more compression before jumping on the picnic table. Not crazy about the low camera angle either, makes the character look a little too distorted at times.
.end skateboarder could use more compression on the landing before recovering back up, kind of like at the top of the bench.
.bowling dialog audio is very low, hard to hear and animation is a bit stiff going from pose to pose. You probably have a few too many poses on the talking guy as well.
.i don’t like the way the camera pulls back on the king tut hippo/kid, where he says, “it is I, the king.” If you can’t change that, I would consider cutting that shot and trying to have the audio play over another non-dialog shot, and then hook up to the bit about ordering a pizza. If not, maybe cut it so he just says, “I would like to order a pizza.”
.the pigtail tall lady dancer should hold that first pose longer when she flicks her right arm out. And when she ends up in the man’s arms, perhaps kick a leg out. That animation seems like it has potential, but feels rushed. Maybe the guy should drop her on her butt at the end?
Phredrek
01-05-2012, 01:24 AM
awesome!
thank you for that list of recommendations. Really good to have fresh eyes on this.
Thanks and again and I really appreciate it!
LaziusKaye
01-05-2012, 09:33 AM
Nice ollie dude in the first clip :)
CGTalk Moderation
01-05-2012, 09:33 AM
This thread has been automatically closed as it remained inactive for 12 months. If you wish to continue the discussion, please create a new thread in the appropriate forum.
vBulletin v3.0.5, Copyright ©2000-2013, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.